skipped across the river

skipped across the river

A Chapter by Ana Papaya
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skipped across the river 
one, two step, three

momma's ghost was chasing
but she can't catch me

daddy says 
"go run, but ain't nowhere to hide"

he don't know ma's scared 
to cross the other side

skipped across the river
one, two step, three

daddy's chasin' momma
momma's chasin' me

the river took my momma
right before she died

now my daddy's set to cross
to the other side

skipped across the river
one, two step, three

goodbye ma and pa
now it's lonely me

skipping 'cross the river
step one, two, three

one step, two step
two step, three

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© 2020 Ana Papaya


Author's Note

Ana Papaya
My parents are both alive and well. I promise.

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Reminded me of school and skipping. Us kids would spend hours with a skipping rope. We also used to hold hands and skip way back when. The theme here is death and loss and makes me wonder how a small child would deal with the loss of a second parent. In my own family a child has lost one parent, and I know how difficult that was, yet alone becoming orphaned.

Chris

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

10 Months Ago

Thanks a bunch Chris, I have both mine still. Can imagine how difficult must be on a child.thanks f.. read more



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This is an unexpected journey! Since I don't feel any sad tone here, I'm reading this as the inevitable transition when some of us have to leave our parents behind & cross the river into some new aesthetic that they might not understand or maybe they've rejected as not fitting with their beliefs. I appreciate when writers depict the parent-child bond as not remaining deep & everlasting becuz lots of times it doesn't! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

9 Months Ago

Thank you for finding and reading this one!!!
And your fantastic comment!
A wonderful poem shared. I liked the hidden meaning in the words. I enjoyed the flow of thoughts and you allowed the reader to fall into the words. A outstanding poem shared dear Ana.
Coyote

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

10 Months Ago

Thank you again for all the nice comments on my poems today.
Coyote Poetry

10 Months Ago

You are welcome dear Ana. I will have time to write and read soon. I reached 62 years old. Semi-reti.. read more
I'm so relieved they're fine. This is a touching poem with an otherworldly touch to it! One of your best for me !

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

10 Months Ago

Thank you very much, Pestonjee!
In spite of the sing.song skipping movement of your words, there's immense adult tenderness and empathy here.' You've managed to create an unawareness of reality because of that repeated one, two, three. This truly is such a heart=wrenching tale.. ..

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

10 Months Ago

Such a wonderful comment. Thank you. :)
A very briskly flowing write, Ana. It certainly reads like a child's nursery rhyme except it has a slightly darker tone and theme. One can imagine many different possibilities for the reasons for those chasings across the river if one thinks more deeply about it, and it makes the poem most intriguing. Loved the meter, here.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

10 Months Ago

Thanks for the great comment, Inessa.
Reminded me of school and skipping. Us kids would spend hours with a skipping rope. We also used to hold hands and skip way back when. The theme here is death and loss and makes me wonder how a small child would deal with the loss of a second parent. In my own family a child has lost one parent, and I know how difficult that was, yet alone becoming orphaned.

Chris

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

10 Months Ago

Thanks a bunch Chris, I have both mine still. Can imagine how difficult must be on a child.thanks f.. read more
This one sounds almost like a nursery rhyme, but the subject is death and the fear of it. Now it appears the last parent is about to depart. Such times are when we feel our own mortality most acutely.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

10 Months Ago

Thank you JtB. That's what I was going for with this one. The dark(ish) nursery rhyme. Very much ap.. read more


... a sad song and truly... must admit, I felt a sense of relief after reading your author's note :)

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

10 Months Ago

Thanks Neville. Nothing to worry about.
To be honest it was an experimental piece trying to m.. read more
Ana Papaya

10 Months Ago

Thanks Neville. Nothing to worry about.
To be honest it was an experimental piece trying to m.. read more
Neville

10 Months Ago


.............. and scary :)
but, will they stay that way
nuther nice little dark doin
Ana Papaya

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

10 Months Ago

Who knows?
Not me. :)
Thanks a bunch Mr. Brown!
Aww! It's like "Clementine"!


Posted 10 Months Ago


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Dripping Chocolate Madness

10 Months Ago

Lolol go even further and you'll find Donald duck in anti Nazi WWII propaganda, from Disney.
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Dripping Chocolate Madness

10 Months Ago

See, personally...
I blame you.
It seems obvious.
Ana Papaya

10 Months Ago

Preposterous

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