Ambrosia Paper Crane

Ambrosia Paper Crane

A Poem by Anata
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Winner of the paper crane contest

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The cold needle in my arm

Warming my existence

Keeping me locked away

Reality takes a spin

I venture the skies

I float between heaven and hell

Like a superhero

Searching for another rush

 

It wasn’t until I saw you

I realised that ambrosia

Has more than one form

Though I couldn’t inject you in my veins

Your eyes took me on a trip

Coiled up in your love

Like a superhero

I protected you from evil

 

Searching my way round

Hiding from reality

A single paper crane in my pocket

Reminding me of the day

Ambrosia in your eyes

Dancing together

Under the flashing lights

Coiled up in your love

Like a superhero

I crawled back in your arms

 

No longer was I a stranger

As I washed away my sins

Your eyes locked me up

As your love

Warmed my blood

I took you with me

Out of the window we flew

But reality hit you

Like a superhero

I washed my hands in your blood

 

The paper crane soaked

The red luscious nectar

My world fell apart

As your ambrosia coloured the pavement

A cold feeling, staring into the barrel

My head takes a spin

As our blood coils together

Like a superhero

Lying next to you

Paper cranes never fly away

 

© 2008 Anata


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This was an amazingly overwhelming write, Anata.
Please write again soon.

Posted 3 Years Ago


WOW... what more could be said about this powerful masterpiece.
Why would you ever have stopped writing?

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This poem is really well written and it flows together and the metaphors are great and it kept my attention, very nice work, well done

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

What a piece....strong metaphors here....gripped me from the beginning...and carried me to the end....still looking for the next line....

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really really enjoyed that piece. I could relate to the parallel that you introduced. I think you are a great poetry writer. I have some that I haven't posted yet so I hope you will return to let me know what you think. Keep up the good work!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like the likening of ambrosia with a person you feel for .
I like the verse about flying out of the window ,, the entire poem is very good ,Anata,
A little on the dark side.
Loved it and feel so sad .. good job with your expression of feelings.

Chloe
xoxo

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very well written.
impressive wordplay,
great images,
lyrical quality,
i love the dramatic way you start the poem.

"The cold needle in my arm"

again very very well written.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

incredible poetry here, sweeping and sad....awesome word play 'hero/heroine....' the metaphoric bloodshed....a deep poem Well written.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is full of win. So much so that It's by far the best submission for this contest. Congratulations!! You're a winner. I will be sending you an email with more details about the project and so on.

This piece captures everything I tried to put into my work in into the script for the comic. You've created some wonderfully vibrant and beautiful visuals and this is something that the art team I am putting together will be more than happy to work with.

You truly have a gift.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Normally I would be opposed to a poem that intermingles heroin and romance, but I think you made a very valid point that it takes hope to get people to try to stop using. Poetically, it was beautiful. Right up to the last line.

Posted 14 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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