"Once Upon A Time..."

"Once Upon A Time..."

A Poem by Chris
"

Catch a breath

"

“Once Upon A Time…”

 

There was this dream…

 

The kind many wish they had

they held

or lived

or survived

or remembered in their night(s) mares.

 

A simple lil thing.

A momentary thing.

A caught within - ‘tween two breaths instant,

A thousand yard stare

…fixed…

 just behind your eyes -

Gazing into…

that bin holding all the life-shattered glass

Menagerie you ever treasured…

Yeah, that ONE!...right there…

 

And god I cried.

 

Chris

© 2020 Chris


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Peeling back the lense allows visions beyond average comprehension. I feel like I'm free-falling into the anxiety before the trip starts. Man, I like it. A most enjoyable read.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Chris

2 Weeks Ago

Welcome and thanks for pausing... come by anytime and always speak your mind. Chris
Treasured or not, it's poignant ..

Posted 1 Month Ago


Chris

1 Month Ago

I found it to be quite ...true.
I love the emotion
within this lovely
piece ..a potpourri
mixture of intense
feelings come
flooding through

And god I cried!
sums it all up so
nicely..

well done..





Posted 1 Month Ago


Dreams are they the path to tomorrow or the shadows of yesterday? A little of both, if we are honest.

Posted 1 Month Ago


' And god I cried.'

And thinking back, looking back into.. the tears still fall .. ..

There is that one special second when you want to gasp, weep, laugh, thank the all around.. because it give an unexpected feeling of YES! It's something inexplicable, it's something mystical and more.. can never be repeated.. and - never will fade. Perhaps?

You made me think back.. and, I did. Thank you so very much.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Chris

1 Month Ago

sometimes the "back" IS all we have, isn't it...
emmajoy

1 Month Ago

It is, and, so much happier, calmer, more beautiful than whatever other decade or.. The past has mu.. read more
I liked how you used lil, bin, 'tween, to get the attention back. The images wasn't that much guiding, but I remembered such dreams of mine.
Opening was perfect. And I liked that 'th' and 't' alliteration, including that short 'thin'. You were building up nicely, but the reveal wasn't exploring a lot, I could use the writer to guide me more.

Posted 1 Month Ago



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Added on June 18, 2020
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Chris
Chris

Lansing, MI



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