... be brave!

... be brave!

A Poem by Angel Bird
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Haiku 5

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-- A Warrior Should
-- Fight For Peace, Not Die For Oil
-- Money Or Power

© 2008 Angel Bird


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Author's Note

Angel Bird
Not sure if the count of syllables is correct here - if not please tell me - I need to learn ... Thanks in advance!

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Fear not, your 5-7-5 count is correct. I'm one who believes that haiku should reflect different images with each line, all relating to the same picture. For instance:
Still water softly
Eagles cry with flightless wings
My heart is at peace.
- - - I just made that up for the sake of example, so cut some slack on the critique :P
However, I thought this was an overall great haiku. Nice work.
Not to offer a shameless plug here, but with the soldier motif that Be Brave emotes you may want to check out my own March of the Teddy Bears.

Posted 11 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.




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The seasonal aspect of a Haiku is not present in the haiku. I love the message overall still. Nicely done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You know I am not one of counting! You were the one who thought me!
Thank you for your very strong statement!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Angel-your straight forward thoughts are powerfully invented
be brave! and to define what the worrior is
in brightness- as warm quality that sheds peace
and understanding- your words are uplifting
this is beautifully rendered from the heart.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A passionate piece on a touchy subject. A million kudos to you for voicing your thoughts and good luck in the True Talent contest. Winners will be announced later today hopefully!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

p.s. and thanks for reviewing me a few weeks ago - I haven't been around lately, so only just getting back to returning reviews.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

The simplicity of this statement kind of enhances the message. Nice work.
The syllable count is right for a haiku [5-7-5]; however, I think haikus are supposed to be about nature itself. A piece like this would probably be classed as a 'senryu' rather than a haiku - same structure and everything, just open to all topics like human nature, humour, war etc.
I don't know a lot about it, though, so I might be wrong.

Thanks for sharing.

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I really dug this. Thank you for sharing it with me.

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

such a powerfully written haiku form, as meaning speaks valumes with minimal wording, and captures
full spectrum imagery, with warrior, peace, oil, money, this heartfelt poem reflects the sad political
motive behind moments of our time, one can feel the natural dynamics behind your passionate words,
and that being able to see things for what they are in light of true meaning, very well written, thanks

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Fear not, your 5-7-5 count is correct. I'm one who believes that haiku should reflect different images with each line, all relating to the same picture. For instance:
Still water softly
Eagles cry with flightless wings
My heart is at peace.
- - - I just made that up for the sake of example, so cut some slack on the critique :P
However, I thought this was an overall great haiku. Nice work.
Not to offer a shameless plug here, but with the soldier motif that Be Brave emotes you may want to check out my own March of the Teddy Bears.

Posted 11 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.


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