Reckless Abandon

I read the prologue and first part of your story and I'm going to say this. This is only one person's opinion and honestly it means nothing. You are a writer..I am a writer. Everything we write is subject to praise and criticism. In the end none of that matters.

With that said. I was impressed. For a 19 year old you have very good story telling skills. I visualized myself in your character's shoes and felt for him. That is the highest compliment a writer can get in my opininion. My only criticism is too much detail...it kind of slowed the story down. example :(He heard the sound of the ignition powering up and before he knew it he was off. ) Too much unnecesary detail can clog an otherwise good story and slow it down.

Other than that its a good story at least what I read of it. Much too long to be considered a short story. I think you put a lot of work into this and you are in too much of a hurry to get reviews. In other words this should be rewritten, and submitted to publishers as a book. It's good enough. It's relevent and important enough.

That's just my opinion....take my advice and rewrite it and try to get it published as a book. I have kids. I've been through moves so maybe you touched a nerve with me but I think you put way too much into this to give it away on the web.

Best wishes and keep writing.
Steve Z

Posted 16 Years Ago