Chase the sun, home

1 poem; consisting of 3 short poetic forms - Naani, Whitney and Nonet

Chase the sun, home...


I flounder, wear the grey
of stalking sentinels; they tower
and smirk...their stone coat-tails
swallow my feet

the city
will not mourn me;
it pulses
in my rear view...
I breathe deep
and chase the sun;
blacktop snaking toward...life

home peels back the corporate layers;
bleeds gold across my eyes, draws fire
to country skin, runs fingers
through limp hair. I kick off
city boots, to feel
dirt underfoot,
drink freedom
from the
air

Reviews

[Sasha]

~ thank you so much, Legion
I'm stoked that you enjoyed this piece, my friend,
it was from a poetry challenge where we were to write about
leaving the city, and heading back home to the country
inspired by the picture above
thanks for stopping by, I'll come and check your page out shortly
*hugs*
Sasha xx

[Legion]

A wandering we will go. I love the idea behind this and the imagery you provide. Beautifully done. Bravo.

[Sasha]

~ Izumiko, I'm touched by such a lovely comment, my friend
and I'm thrilled that you enjoyed this piece as much.

I love putting different poetic forms into one poem; they
create new and wonderful rhythms, adding to the texture of a piece

thanks so much for spending some time with this one,
I'll be stopping by your page, shortly :)
*hugs*
Sasha xx

[Sasha]

~ D.Pesek, thank you so much for taking a moment to read this piece
I found that picture while surfing the net, and it just grabbed me.
I'm glad you enjoyed this poem, my friend...I'll check out some of
your poetry shortly
*hugs*
Sasha xx

[D. Pesek]

this poem is great and the picture you chose for it is terrific.

[FuMiko]

I love it! The rhythm of the piece is absolutely enchanting, and the imagry is beyond perfect.
I'd love to tell you what you could do to improve this particular piece, but there isn't much I could think of.