Unrestrained

Unrestrained

A Poem by Anima Inspired

 

Delicate,
like the mouth
of an orchid,
sipping the sun
for the very first time,
 
delicate is my heart
 
I breathe the scent
of ocean spray and
feel my soul
expanding
pressing at my skin
until, heavy and thick,
almost inhumanly restrictive,
I shed the shell that conceals
my feverish essence,
 
until I am free
 
to wander the restless shores
as a being without convention,
where my words marry the wind
and become the voice of seabirds,
the song of swaying grasses,
and the private thoughts
that land like raindrops
on the lips of lovers
just before they kiss.

© 2008 Anima Inspired


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Well...I'm jelly. I don't even know how to explain it. The language you use, especially in the first and last verses is so poetically beautiful. Where do words like these come from? This kind of imagery, these descriptions, I have tried to emulate this kind of language in my own writing, and I just can't do it.

"and the private thoughts
that land like raindrops
on the lips of lovers
just before they kiss."

Seriously, where does this come from? How do you find words like these and mix them so they come out so perfectly placed as to create this kind of imagery? I love how you mold and fit pictures of nature to coincide with that of the connection and intimacy between lovers. I like that feeling that I get when reading words like these.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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What I found interesting about this piece is your first stanza was short and simple, not overly descriptive but right on the money, using only 19 words. Then the passion builds more in the second stanza as does the word count, 36 here. Then finally, the last stanza is 44 words but is so brilliantly worded that it felt like 70 words. The swelling of the stanzas matches the arousal within the reader which is masterful.

BEST LINES:
where my words marry the wind
and become the voice of seabirds,
the song of swaying grasses,
and the private thoughts
that land like raindrops
on the lips of lovers
just before they kiss.

GREAT JOB... yet again.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I do not know that I could tap into the sheer elemental imagery that you provide in so many of your pieces. The best example of what I am trying to say would be this for most people:

You see a rock. Now draw the rock.

I could not draw the rock.
Your drawing would make the rock jealous.

Posted 13 Years Ago


AHHHH...a sweet release indeed.

Posted 13 Years Ago


hey, this was something! I loved the ending. really really I am melting. hmm the sort of poetry that has my eyes still glued to it after reading it, so I need to re-read again and again..... love. "where my words marry the windand become the voice of seabirds," -------what can be stronger? ahhh my heart.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Absolutely beautiful! Your use of metaphors is very creative and moving.
Very nice work.
Shirley Petrandis

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You are very gifted in not only your style but ablity as well.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

*snap snap*

this poem is elequoently romantic.
I"m very impressed the descriptive matephors used to portray the delicacy of your heart and the breathe of freedom. wow..

all tied together beautifully with my favorite line in the whole poem "where my words marry the wind" to finish strong with a pwerful romantic twist!

i will certianly be reading more of your work

magnificent!

much love n respect

-Lalli

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is wonderfully beautiful. Very nice job with imagery and the words flow so beautifully.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

So...after the third read-thru the word(s) to describe this piece would have to be...stunning. Make no mistake, there are other words that apply as well such as; serene, floaty, beautiful, remarkably soft, etc. but I'm sticking to "stunning".

Satine

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Well...I'm jelly. I don't even know how to explain it. The language you use, especially in the first and last verses is so poetically beautiful. Where do words like these come from? This kind of imagery, these descriptions, I have tried to emulate this kind of language in my own writing, and I just can't do it.

"and the private thoughts
that land like raindrops
on the lips of lovers
just before they kiss."

Seriously, where does this come from? How do you find words like these and mix them so they come out so perfectly placed as to create this kind of imagery? I love how you mold and fit pictures of nature to coincide with that of the connection and intimacy between lovers. I like that feeling that I get when reading words like these.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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