True or False

True or False

A Poem by Ian

Promise after promise from the president

everything he says is irralevent

its a joke like santa clause giving me a present

thank god my mind is so independent

because stereo typers say crime run through our bloodline

all we like is Mac 11, AK-47, the glocc, and the nine

rappin and being an athelete is our only goal

just see the light because you lived in that hole

cant always count on ball

what if you miss that shot and your begining to fall

And your not receiving that one call

If ya hearin this i know ya feelin odd

focus on ya education and look up to god

its a long road but its worth the drive

finish your journey and tell them how to survive

True or Flase

if you chose false bring your ownself down to that rat whole and let the people around you make it in life real talk because no one needs a person of negativity

 

A special message for all those trying to survive and is feeling what i am sayin

 IAN

© 2010 Ian


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I think it's the 16th line, you wrote, 'True or Flase' Flase=False. And I think that was the only mistake I caught, other than that it was a pretty good poem overall and I think the first two lines appealed to me because I think it's spot on. Not gonna say anything else cuz I've already been accused of being racist. 100/100

Posted 14 Years Ago


Wow I liked how powerful this was. It's true the government does sometimes make promises. That it can't keep, but we just have to keep going on. Great write :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


Good….creative….
insightful.....
great work indeed..


Posted 14 Years Ago


Compartment 114
Compartment 114
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Power to the people, and may the Government feel our rage, so they will start to listen. Instead of considering one's self a Democrat or a Republican, we need to start electing those who associate themselves as an Americans first and for most.

Nice right!
RLG,
Tommy


Posted 14 Years Ago


The President make too many promises that the USA can't pay for. Cost of war take half the budget. I like this poem. It is hard to stay positive. But you are correct. We must. A excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 14 Years Ago


its a joke like santa clause giving me a present
thank god my mind is so independent

haha! love that

Posted 14 Years Ago


A deep and powerful poem:)

Posted 14 Years Ago


i dig it man nice rhyme at first i almost thought it was a sonnet but it s not tis real close tho

Posted 14 Years Ago


Interesting write! I like how direct and straightforward you are in your writing, particularly in this piece where you're actually presenting your thoughts and opinions. The message that you express is a really important one, and I thought that for such a huge topic, you tackled it superbly. Great write,
~PaperHearts

Posted 14 Years Ago


Very good, some people and the media itself needs to stop making the NBA and rapping just a few inches away from success, and start telling the young people to go to school, get their diploma, and try to get a secondary education. I really like this one.

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Ian

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