Grain of Sand

Grain of Sand

A Poem by TamiViolet
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sonnet VI

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Summer lovers lost in a robe of light,

Thoughts found in a mermaid's hair,

Brightness ascending torrid thighs,

Two ripened hearts beyond compare,

Peculiar how folds the imagination,

When summer's blue view is banned,

An hourglass, our sweet vacation,

Dwindles to blank stones of land,

Ability never put together entirely,

We are no longer as the white whales,

But men dwelling in a moon so precise,

Venus amid a wreckage of rainbow shells;

     The tide must ebb and flow by rule and rule,

     And we disappear into the attic of the skull...

 

© 2009 TamiViolet


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Morning sky cloudy and gray,
Here am I, Must as the day,
Empty bed you're still on my mind,
Empty heart nothing defines how,
Lonely, Lonely since you left me,
Lonely since you left me,
Lonely since you left me here alone.


Your poem reminds me of that song. It's stuck in my head. Although I've never been able to figure out who sings it. Google doesn't bring up anything. Amazing poem though :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


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Oh you lovely, talented poet. This is incredibly profound - and in form no less. Excellent metaphors.

"The tide must ebb and flow by rule and rule,

And we disappear into the attic of the skull... "

WOW.

You are so talented, Tami. I love reading your work.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great visuals and feeling. A very emotional piece

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

awesome write... love the last line.. good job..

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Another gorgeous write...love that last line...

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

as always... great piece of writing...
hope all is well with you...

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

into the attic of the skull...

I LIKE that. Nicely done my dear. Very nicely done.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is wonderful. I am always a little envious of somemone who writes so masterfully in a form like this.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The words captivated and moved me like the wind. When it ended I wanted more another journey. Very powerful and direct romantic flow of the english language. Almost like a dance. Great work here.

When summer's blue view is banned,
An hourglass, our sweet vacation,
Dwindles to blank stones of land,

wonderful phrase here.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ahhhhhh Appolonia I have missed you magic in words dear, this was exquisite and warm. I loved the flow and metaphors used to bring the imagery to life deep in the mind of the reader. well done and well written in all accounts.
I loved these lines such a vision it created for me!
Summer lovers lost in a robe of light,

Thoughts found in a mermaid's hair,

Brightness ascending torrid thighs,

Two ripened hearts beyond compare,
Lasla

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh...What a beautiful sonnet!
It was so thoughtful and intense. The flow of this piece is simply brilliant..It's absolutely flawless.
The imagery in the opening line is outstanding.
I also loved the way you concluded it, that was very deep-

The tide must ebb and flow by rule and rule,
And we disappear into the attic of the skull...

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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