Undone

Undone

A Poem by TamiViolet
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This one just came to me out of nowhere, it seems.

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I still wait for my love story,
But no longer brood in empty
Drawn out light of summer’s
Discontent…

          Will I die without knowing?

          You must be there…
          Somewhere…
          Winter licks my body,
         
Yet my bosom remains warm…

Secrets I cannot hide
If for one moment these
Brown eyes blink…
Frost drips from dark lashes,

And I stand unfinished as life
Kisses death…
Flames transfer to ashes
Scattered upon Lake Erie,

And I am
Finally free….
Wondering…

          Amidst a fragrant blue mist
          Of forget-me-nots…

 



 

© 2012 TamiViolet


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Woh, dude, this was totally awesome!!! Im like shocked right now-It totally blew me away hehe. I love the haunting effect you gave it, and the melancholy tone of lonliness and despair that really made it. It's like a lost soul walking the beaches at night searching for a long lost love or somethin, and u become a ghost in the process--kinda creates this haunting hopeless romantic story that can make anyone who reads it cry. I had a few tears myself hehe. This really hit me a lot. I definitely agree with Coyote, too. Beautiful piece! Fantastic job here! :)

B.A.

Posted 11 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.




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apollonia, how do you create such work is the beauty this poem, and the graphic. surely you have blended art with magic. and a tempest desire.
atonishing and eloquent. tantalyzing

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

what a beautiful poem lovey i liked this :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

finally free . . . for what I wonder . . .

I love your words, sometimes I feel like I could step right into them.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful, heartfelt, touching, inspiring, just amazing.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I'm blown away that something so beautiful and magical pours out of you without you having to create it. That says so much about your soul. Your words are delicate, but effecting. The only way I can describe it is.. a haunting whisper. I aspire to this level of expression, this is the type of poetry I really wish I could write. Amazing.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This sang its own song to my ears from within my dear Appolonia.
I really enjoyed these lines they really blew me away .
You must be there…
Somewhere…
Winter licks my body,
Yet my bosom remains warm…
The entire write had a wonderful flow and the picture it painted to me was a mix of serenity and searching for the one love that sparks your soul into a single stand alone flower among the field of forget-me-nots

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love your imagery! I can also relate to the emotion. It spoke to me...very good :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lovely writing - with a reflective image that just complemented it nicely...

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very nice poem... the 5th stanza (and I stand... is awesome). The closing lines are perfect. I'm not crazy about the word 'empty' in the second line... with everything else so full of passion, i find it a bit devoid of relevence. Great writing, otherwise. I'm ging to add it to my library.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I know what it's like to feel unfinished, in limbo. It is an awful feeling. You wrote this beautifully, even though it is sad. Plz continue to hang in there and never give up. It will get ya when ya least expect it, I'm told.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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