Impact

deliberately short...a bit different...

 

 

We crashed Heaven

This evening;

The stars -

Wouldn't interfere;

The planets -

Laughed ~

Even Venus;

The moon

Needed nothing -

But

Tonight...

 

 

Reviews

[Su' Nacnetaf]

It seems to me, the shorter you write, the more difficult it is to fully appreciate it, as in others, I will have to read this over and over again trying to find all meanings, yet, this is not a bad criticism, I love it when a writing encourages me to ponder through it, trully marvelous. Excellent writing.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Your wording in this piece is truely to be savored and thought upon as brilliant!

[Ruth]

WOW! lol
Shattering and yet embracing!
Brilliantly written, concise and intense, imagery is breathtaking, makes us aware of how vast everything is whilst we create a life that stalls and flows beneath this all!
Excellent poem love
xx

[Art]

truly nice work...

[Robin]

I have sat along the lake shore perched upon a rock playing my guitar to the moon , I can drift away in this poem to that special place

[.]

you have a true talent for smooth expression:-)

Great poem!

james:-)

[.]

I love your style and there's nothing wrong with short, if you can say that much with so few words, why use more.

[Bertie]

Ashort piece but full of story.
You've created a piece that can be interpreted by everyone who reads it and it will mean different things to different people.
It's difficulto to obtain that universiality in your writing so well done :)

[Von Halford]

Love it. Especially with the song I'm listening to backing it haha. Pour Me Another by Atmosphere. I read your poem on beat. Sounded amazing

[funeralmoon]

i love the picture i myself play the violin so i was drawn to the picture ans in return a great poem.