You...

Couldn't you have looked back..?
Couldn't you've apologized..?
Or done the million things
you did in my head...?


but instead you just walked away...
why do I not answer?-you ask...
why do I hang on? you say..


because when you said you had a dream..
I felt a step closer to mine..
and every time you inch away...
I feel that go with you..
you seem to carry it on you !

Reviews

[DreyaArt]

Hmm, very interesting write. Seems a bit incomplete, like at the end its almost as if you lost your train of thought and so just left it as is. It kind of feels like there was a great back story here but it is missing. Like you left our something important that the reader needs to fully understand the writing. Maybe its just the point of view that this was written from but it just seems to be lacking some depth to really hook the reader at the beginning and create an ending rather then just leaving it undone. But otherwise great start in my opinion. Keep writing, learning and improving :)

[quinfinn]

and this is exactly how it feels, as well! i don't think i have ever heard it put more succinctly than this. well done!

[Arabdha]

you're way too kind ...thank you :-)

[quinfinn]

welcome!

[Leslie Philibert]

another good write !...