The Cave

The Cave

A Story by Tsukin Archangel
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Two teens last moments waiting in a cave for their rescue in pure dialogue

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"You know sometimes the stars don't shine, but that don't mean they ain't there."
"What? What does that even mean? That  doesn't make any sense. Of course they're there, it's not like they just vanished."
"Stop whining kid."
"I'm not whining,  I'm stating a fact."
"Don't get smart with me kid."
"Stop laughing old man."
"..."
"Ow! What was that for! That hurt."
"Respect your elders."
" What's too respect? You're the one that keeps saying you're young at hear-OW!"
"Even then I'm olda' than you."
"Pssh, sure."
"You'll cherish 'dese moments later kid, ya'll see. Maybe then you'll understand what I mean."
"..."

"Hey Jack what's up, what's got'cha head in the clouds huh?"
"Ah, nothing George, just my family."
"What 'bout them?"
"Ya, know, my Granddad, there's this thing he'd say I never understood."
"What was that?"
"Nothing, nothing, it's not important."
"Sure it is, besides nothing else to do here. Ah!"
"Hey, hey hey, don't move, you don't want your wound to re-open."
"Jack, you gotta stop worryin' 'bout me, I'm screwed...harder than a nail in a headboard, you know it's internal."
"...Don't say that."
"It's true."
"You don't know that."
"Yeah I do, man I can feel it inside a' me. I'm gonna die."
"..."
"Hey, hey, Jack, kid, man, dude, death's not the worst thing to happen to us."
"What am I supposed to do?"
"What? You gotta speak up."
"I said: WHAT AM I SUPPOSED TO DO! WHAT AM I SUPPOSED TO TELL THEM? YOUR FAMILY? WHAT AM I SUPPOSED TO DO WITH MYSELF?"
"....Live."
"I can't, not if I'm going to be alone."
"You won't be."
"You won't be there."
"Other's care 'bout you Jack."
"So? What does that matter?"
"It matter's a ton, it means I don't have to worry about what'll happen to ya' when I'm gone."
"Don't say that George."
"I told you, I'm gonna die, I'm not gonna be 'round much longer."
"Stop it. Help will be here any minute, you're gonna be okay."
"No. I'm moving on, you've gotta accept that."
"They said three hours I'm sure that's passed by now."
"Jack-"
"George. Stop. Don't say anything."
"Jack you're sounding hysterica-"
"Shut up."
"Jack-"
"STOP! YOU'RE GONNA BE OKAY!"
"..."
"George?"
"..."
"G-George?"
"..."
"GEORGE!"
"-ey over here! I think I heard them!"
"You're too late."
"Hey, take my hand, kid."
"George died."
"I'm sorry kid."
"No you're not, you don't even know him."
"Okay...take my hand."
"No."
"Wha-?"
"Leave me."
"Kid, come on, is this what that George kid would want."
"No."
"Then come o-"
"It's what I want."
"Ok uhm, you wait here."
~~~
"Hey Bob, what's the hold up?"
"The kid's not leaving, his friend died."
"Hmmm, tough huh, get the rope, let me see what I can do."
~~~
"Who are you?"
"A friend, no need to be hostile."
"My last 'friend' died."
"I know it's tough, bu-"
"Yeah, yeah he'd want me to live, I don't care."
"Look kid-"
"Stop calling me kid, I'm not that young."
"Okay fine then, what's your name?"
"...Jack."
"Okay Jack, I know what it's like to lose people. I lost a lot of friends in the war-"
"You were a soldier?"
"Yes, okay but the point is, even when you think the worlds a total dick and you wanna throw in the towel, you can't cause you're the only way they can ever live on. Through what you do."
"...Just  cause the stars don't shine, but that don't mean they ain't there."
"What?"
"Nothing."
"Here's the rope!"
"Thanks Bob, okay Jack, take the end, we'll pull you out, okay?"
"...Okay."
"Good boy."

© 2013 Tsukin Archangel


Author's Note

Tsukin Archangel
Short lil dialogue for Helena's dialogue contest: Story bout dying, coming terms with that death, moving on~ Hope you enjoy it and it make sense the "~~~" are like scene breaks. So what you think? George and Jack just friends? lol

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I think they loved each other and to think about losing someone you love and are intimate with just makes me feel so sad. I thought the guy I love committed suicide and I was all torn up inside, but he's fine now and I still love him.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Tsukin Archangel

6 Years Ago

D; Awww i feel so sorry for you, though at leas it all turned out alright for you in the end. But ye.. read more
I loved the concept of an all dialogue story, especially the fact that I could feel him becoming hysterical when his friend dies.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Tsukin Archangel

6 Years Ago

Yeah it was something new for me to do. Surprisingly fast/easy to do actually when you got down to i.. read more
If all of my fingers were thumbs, I'd give you eleven thumbs up...don't ask how, I'd make it happen...maybe steal an extra from George's grave....no, that's just wrong. There's something seriously wrong with me. I wish thee luck, and hope you win/won. I'm going to quote that tad about the stars on profile now. It needs to spread.

Invisible *s/100

Posted 6 Years Ago


Writer #00

6 Years Ago

I think they were friends, but that Jack purposefully isolated himself from society and his only fri.. read more
Tsukin Archangel

6 Years Ago

Lol glad you likey~ NOW U GOTTA READ CHAP 11
George and Jack just friends? I might've built the wrong assumption here-cough-

Anyway I like the story. Honestly I did. The flow of the dialogue is credit worthy and its content being natural is also credit worthy.

This is an amusing piece and it opened a lot of things in this imaginative mind. Helped out with my writer's block but still...


...I'm still stuck ~(=T A T=)~

Posted 6 Years Ago


Tsukin Archangel

6 Years Ago

yes lol Smexy sexy italian~~~ Gotta love him, he's so bamf lol
Katherine Enma Pineapple

6 Years Ago

lolz XD then remind me to read it... hmm... italian... XD
Tsukin Archangel

6 Years Ago

lol *REMINDS!!*

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Tsukin Archangel
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