- Teardrops and the Rain -

When the rain falls
It´s like heaven´s crying
When the name´s all
The difference that there is

Cause tears are the same
When they´re trying
To grow something good
Out of all the pain

There´s no difference
Between the teardrops and the rain

Author's Note

Tell me what you guys think and feel free to give me back-up!

Reviews

[yashsickle]

I had to read it a couple times before I wrote a review, the words themselves have the intensity of rain drops and the flow of tears. But I feel like the last line is really unneeded. If you would end at "Out of all the pain." I feel like it might be more powerful and wouldn't block off the flow as much as that last line does.

[Erinne S.]

I loved how you compared the two things...rain and tears. This was very soft, short and sweet. I really liked it!

~Erinne

[David Michael]

Hmm. I think I like :) A fitting comparison, I've never thought about either of them "growing something good out of pain" - but truly there's so much pain in the aching ground, rain is one of the few cleansing forces. I love rain even more now!

As short, succinct, and to the point as it already is, I would try even more to pack a punch with every single word. Some of the wording feels a little weak at times - surely there's more powerful, intense words to use... But on the whole, well done. Looking forward to more!

[joshua deathdealer]

Nicely down. Short yet full of imagery.

[Jarrett]

A soft, thought-invoking poem. Had an even greater impact since it's raining at the moment. Very lovely.

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This is very nicely written and such wonderful imagery.
I loved the last two lines, this flows so wonderful.

[E. R. Rawding]

not bad. interesting subject, and very well-written. keep writing.