Without Him

Without Him

A Poem by Arrinae

She picked up the pieces, 
Heartbroken and soul nearly shattered.
She looked so fragile,
With her mind so tattered,

Her sorrow filled eyes,
Grew cold as ice.
To ease her pain,
No one would suffice.

Without him in her life,
The pain will never fade.
Oh how she cursed them,
Their bloody 'Holy' Crusade.

To see her stand and fight,
So cold and efficient.
She'll end the war for him
Their forces so deficient.

If it costs her own life,
She wouldn't have a care.
Her enemies would still fall,
And suffer far more than despair.

© 2014 Arrinae


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This piece is sad but powerful in its wording. I can't help but like the flow and some lines jump out at you vividly, especially if you can relate: Her sorrow filled eyes, Grew cold as ice. To ease her pain, No one would suffice.

Thanks for the share

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Arrinae

6 Years Ago

You're welcome and thank you!
Dee

5 Years Ago

Beautiful sad and heartfelt..The clear imagery, good flow and rhyme and your well chosen words made .. read more
Arrinae

5 Years Ago

I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you Dee.



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Great emotion in this. It flows from sorrow to numbness to anger, just as it would for someone naturally. She will avenge his death and she will make those responsible suffer as much as she has in the process.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Arrinae

5 Years Ago

I'm glad you like it, Ashira!
i liked the story..a lady fighting for herself and her lover..he is no more but she dont want to give up..it reminds of Rani Jhansi..she fought her battle till her last breath...beautiful poem with lots of emotions ..thanks for sharing :)

Raj

Posted 5 Years Ago


Arrinae

5 Years Ago

Thank you for reviewing. This was a scene that playing out in my dreams so often that I just had to .. read more
raj24

5 Years Ago

beautifully done.. i really enjoyed reading it :)
'She picked up the pieces' wow that part just sucked me right in! Well done.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Arrinae

5 Years Ago

I'm glad you liked it! ^_^ Thank you for the review!
great write! very interesting, I loved the story, very dark but catching. !

Posted 5 Years Ago


Arrinae

5 Years Ago

Thank you very much for reading it and leaving a review. I am glad you liked it!
Bowers

5 Years Ago

:) your so welcome!
There's a gentleness to this poem that lies beneath the heartbreak, I think; it stands out in how her rage is born from what she's lost. Despair, anger pain... they're usually born from loss, and you've helped to convey that very nicely in this poem.
Nice work, Arrinae!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This piece is sad but powerful in its wording. I can't help but like the flow and some lines jump out at you vividly, especially if you can relate: Her sorrow filled eyes, Grew cold as ice. To ease her pain, No one would suffice.

Thanks for the share

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Arrinae

6 Years Ago

You're welcome and thank you!
Dee

5 Years Ago

Beautiful sad and heartfelt..The clear imagery, good flow and rhyme and your well chosen words made .. read more
Arrinae

5 Years Ago

I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you Dee.
"To see her stand and fight,

So cold and efficient.

She'll end the war for him

Their forces so deficient.




If it costs her own life,

She wouldn't have a care."
A good read and write...:)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Arrinae

6 Years Ago

Thank you!
Sami Khalil

6 Years Ago

My pleasure...:)
Your poem has a gentle shape, a form that, intended or not, adds an interesting element. I get a strong "Joan of Arc" vibe from this piece. Tough but fragile woman, motivated by love perhaps gone awry... Nice!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Arrinae

6 Years Ago

Thank you, that is actually what I was going for.

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Added on May 31, 2013
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So a little bit about me... I am a big supporter of the U.S. Military. I have odd, weird, and interesting dreams that often inspire my writing in unique, though usually dark and tragic,ways. I.. more..

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