Do You See?

Just a poem written using to random vocabulary words.

Do you see it now,

How they abhor us?

The bigots never cared for it,

The remuneation they are forced to give us.

They failed to hamper,

Our placid lives.

They kindled a fire in their greed,

With counterfeit promises and words of grander.

They hold to their silver crosses like a talisman,

As though it were a weapon so noxious,

It'd strike us dead.

A trinket like that will cause no harm,

Not to the demons,

Their minds conjure.

The power remains where it always had,

In the beliefs of the strong of will,

Not of the weak sinful minds,

Where evil deeds are sown.

Do you see it now,

The truth in which I speak?

Pray, I hope you are not as blind as they.

 

02/25/2014

Author's Note

Feel free to inbox me with 10 vocabulary words of your own choosing for the next poem or short story for me to weave. They can be anything you wish, though I'd prefer words not often heard or used in today's language as I am working to broaden both my vocabulary and my writing abilities. Thank you!

Reviews

[KAin]

This is very well written, truly! I enjoyed the poem. That which you reference here can truly mean a lot of things in a world that is slowly losing all sense of virtue. It brings to mind the questions of honour which I ask of myself and the world around me daily, though again, it could also mean compassion, hope, love, respect, truthfulness, compassion...
Sometimes it seems there is a grand hunt happening around us, with the world hunting these things to their extinction.
But so long as there are a few who believe and live those concepts, then it cannot die yet.
A few typos here and there - 'remuneation', 'corsses', 'grandure' and 'theey' spring out, but that's just a matter for simple editing, really. A good poem, Arrinae, keep it up!

[Arrinae]

I am glad you think so! Thanks for pointing out the small errors, I missed them when I went back over it the first time. I was originally going to write a short story with the words I chose, but couldn't come up with anything that I could really make my own. So I decided to try a poem instead and I am quite happy with how it turned out. Thank you for reviewing!

[KAin]

It's very well done, friend! No need to worry at all. Thank you for sharing!

[Asem]

i enjoyed it so much , so deep
i will read more from your poems thank you

[Arrinae]

I'm glad you liked it!

[Sami Khalil]

If randomness can create this then what about your order. Bravo on this randomness...:).............

[Arrinae]

Thank you for reviewing!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)..................

[Angel Bird]

I like this. It has a wonderful rhythm, and it awakens something deep. Your phrases are well chosen and written. A poem that resonates far beyond reading. Thumb up.

[Arrinae]

I am glad you enjoyed it! I often like to challenge myself by taking random words and making some sort of tale out of it, be it in a poem or short story. Thank you for your review!