Anger

Anger- It is an animal living within yourself

Anger

It is an animal living within

terrifies all around;

tears are fallen from thousand souls

depressed; horror;

this world is lost for a while;

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when the animal sleeps;

tears! falls from heaven!

like gems so pure!

melting heart!

when time passes!

thinks; let the animal sleeps forever!

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Reviews

[barleygirl]

I love how you describe anger as an animal lurking within, which is very true. Great metaphor, but I would love to see you fill out this metaphor with dynamic descriptions written in "animal" terms. You write: "terrifies" and "tears fallen" and "depressed" (anger is NOT depression) . . . these general terms don't paint a vivid word picture (tears = an overused symbol of sadness/pain - find fresh new ways to show what you mean). Why not growling & gnashing of teeth & snapping claws that draw blood whenever someone gets between this animal rage & whatever is threatening its prey. Use all the senses to build a bigger, more dramatic scene for your message . . . how does rage look, how does it sound? how does it smell? This is what is meant by SHOW instead of tell. You are on the right track, using metaphor to build a strong message & you could take such a message even further in future poems! (((HUGS))) Fondly Margie

[Arundass TP]

thanks friend, writing review with encouraging words. you showed me vivid pictures of anger through your review. Have a nice day.

[Chris Shaw]

Really like the metaphor here. Anger is like a restless animal. You get no peace from it while it is left to prowl. Nicely penned.

Chris

[Arundass TP]

Thank you friend

[Dave Brown]

I think controlled bursts of anger are a bit of a gift.
Without that pressure relief mechanism, frustration can be damaging!
Smash the sh*t out of the g*d d****ed f***en bl**dy useless piece of s**t a*s crap, with a humongous, ball peen hamper, then, take a week (or more) for some pleasant coffees with a friendly, understanding psychoanalyst, and under much more controlled circumstances, carry on with the task at hand.
Although, I have no statistics to support this approach.
Interesting Poem.

[Arundass TP]

thank you, for constructive comment.

[Dave Brown]

Mostly joking but I do think the occasional burst helps clear the pipes
Have a good day

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You capture the horrific effects of anger upon others but also the other side of the person consumed/tortured by it who may well regret it at times of calm, but cannot control the beast within.

[Arundass TP]

thank you friend

[Laz K.]

"Let sleeping dogs lie," right?
But then again, they also say that "Anger is a gift."

The beauty and magic of poetry is that it exposes the complexity of reality.

[Arundass TP]

thank you friend.

[Arundass TP]

thank you friend.

[Coyote Poetry]

Honest and powerful words and thoughts shared.
"when the animal sleeps;
tears! falls from heaven!
like gems so pure!
melting heart!
when time passes!
thinks; let the animal sleeps forever!"
I liked the above lines. Our world, more beasts than gentle hearts. Outstanding poetry and words shared.
Coyote

[h d e rushin]

In todays world of American obtuseness, anger rounds up the posse, unfurls the rope, ties the woman to the chair. It is the animal in us that must be overcome or negotiated. I use to have a cat that slept most of the day away, but when he woke he tried to tear the house down. Cat's have memories but they have no souls. They hate you unwaveringly, then they purr in your ear while you sleep. The last line of your poem made the impertinent truth, that as humans, we need council for our spells, or prayer. The cat finally was in estrus and ran off.... nicely written...dana

[Arundass TP]

thank you friend for your encouragement

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Yes let the beast of rage sleep forever. I absolutely love the imagery of anger you present here. When anger sleeps there is truly peace. Well penned!

[Arundass TP]

thank you friend.

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

You are welcome!

[John the Baptist]

An interesting look here at a major part of the fight/flight response. The poet likens anger to an animal, which is appropriate, because it evolved within our early ancestors as a survival mechanism. You had to either run or fight to survive. Now, however, if it is wrongly expressed, the world can indeed be lost. The second verse notes the positive difference when the animal sleeps. Perhaps we don't have to put it to sleep; anger properly expressed can be useful. Maybe all we need to do is to keep it on a leash.

[Arundass TP]

I am very attracted to your line " we dont have to put it into sleep", thanks, anger is one of the psychic phenomenon. thanks for your review. john