Vampire

Embrace the night

Where old dreams

Take to flight.

 

Dreams in the mists

Now act as cysts,

Upon our burdened souls.

 

Souls that we seek to hide;

Hide from the world.

So no one may chide.

 

Once we were mortal

Now we seek a portal

To realms beyond.

Come along.

 

See as I see.

Shadows sweep at my feet,

Only to meet

The gaze of eyes unseen.

 

Do as I do

Walk into the night

Do not fight.

 

For soon blackness

Will encroach,

Overthrow and

Take hold on what

You fail to see.

 

See the humanity return,

As your soul now burns.

Burns, for what you left behind.

 

No longer me.

No longer you.

 

Tell me how does it feel?

To have your soul ripped

From you.

To feel the pressure of

Life and death leave.

 

Then you will see,

It is me.

Reviews

[Legion]

50/50. Typical vampire type piece, but a good attempt though. Think about the story and dig deeper to make it stand out and take your reader by the throat with fangs glistening in that final moonlight that will be the last thing they see (so to speak). In other words, make it memoriable. Keep 'em coming.