Inspiration Infatuation

Torn between lustful infatuation

And fearful of your intimidation

Your intellect sets my logic on fire.

 

Exploring my brain for rhyme or reason,

Longing for concrete, set explanation,

It only increases psychic desire

 

To caress your wondrous mental physique,

Bask in that sensual rhythmic technique…

Cognitive trap for emotional pyre.

 

Come now, virtuoso I’ll stoke that flame!

Visionary wildfire’s nowhere near tame,

As it shan’t until I finally tire

 

Of your dazzling, frightening intellect

To withdraw to solitude’s introspect,

But for now I’ll survey, merely… admire.

Author's Note

Comments? Suggestions?

Reviews

[Anna Mitchell]

Pwoah!

I love this poem. The rhyming scheme is tight and adds nice rhythm, pace and energy.
'Your intellect sets my logic on fire.' - I love this line.

And articulating a passion that is directed at a person's mental rather than physical being is unusual, and therefore fresh and thought-provoking!

Thank you for sharing it :-)

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much Anna! There is something more satisfying about falling for someone because of their mind rather than their looks.

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

Tres Bien, this writ....

my favourite couplet...
Come now, virtuoso I’ll stoke that flame!
Visionary wildfire’s nowhere near tame,

[anne]

Come now, virtuoso I’ll stoke that flame!
Visionary wildfire’s nowhere near tame,
As it shan’t until I finally tire............one just have to love it... :))

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you Anne, I am glad you liked this one!

[Skai Rain]

Ooh, I really like this. No criticism currently is popping into my head. I very much enjoyed :)

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks so much Brit!

[John Ryan]

nice flow that you have here

i like it

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks much John!

[Frozen Eyes]

Surveying admiration... good job..

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you Frozen!

[Einstein Noodle]

we think it .. so be it .. i like this .. the first three verses completely enveloped me .. i was totally engaged .. the third caused me to stumble a bit working out the meaning .. maybe its the possessive in wildfire's .. and i am not sure what it refers to in this line "As it shan’t until I finally tire" i probably need to have another cup of coffee .. i can be pretty dense sometimes :)
i must say the turn in your last line surprised me .. i was expecting the speaker to get inside that brain and really pop those neurons .. so i am set up to watch for your next installment ... when you are tired of watching .. admiring .. ;) i had great fun reading your poem .. again those first three verses really got me! nice one says i!
E.

[Ashira Macy]

Haha no Noodle, you are fine, that line actually needs to be reworked a bit into something to match the rest of the poem, it doesn't quite fit right. Thank you so much for your feedback, I am so glad you enjoyed it!

[Mary Bosworth]

Very beautifully described .............

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks Mary.

[Rocans]

This is a form I rarely see, and seldom use myself. You have done it to good effect here. I liked it. Here's greatness "To caress your wondrous mental physique,Bask in that sensual rhythmic technique." Stellar lines! But I have to say I have written a poem with the same premise. :) A suggestion is that you lengthen it :) I need your words to caress my mind more, to make me feel more sated :)

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you much Rocans, I may revisit it later and see what I can do to change it up a bit.

[Jack Wolfe]

Quite an enthralling piece, Ashira, an intellectual game of infatuation and mindful ploys of lust and penetrable desire . . . an admiring heart from afar; I think we've all been here at some point.

[Ashira Macy]

I am happy you connected Wolfey, and yes, it is sometimes more fun and less disappointing to admire someone from afar.