Waterfalls and Wildflowers

As we sailed away,

Tides melding bronze

With vivacious greens

And calm blue hues,

Spectacles overtook senses.

 

Water came crashing down

The rocky slopes

In a liquid avalanche

Of droplets painted ivory, prisms

Reserved for dreamers like you.

 

We passed through

The downward stream,

The past hitting us like bricks

And soaking us

Through to our memories.

 

You just laughed -

A little water never hurt anyone.

And I reached out

To the side of the cavern,

Plucking that golden wildflower

 

Tucking it behind your ear.

I smiled as you danced,

Splashing in the puddles,

And singing in the rain

Of childhood innocence.

Author's Note

First poem I have written in a while, I have been having terrible writer's block as of late, so it may not be up to par. I tried to write this from a different point of view than my own, a father's perspective, so that is a new venture for me.

Reviews

[SurindrasFawn]

A fascinating read indeed as if venturing into an oceanic painting while the artist's world is slowly brought to realistic life. You have captured the imagination of a child and preserved it in this poem literally whisking the reader away ever so gently into that present place. I envisioned waterfalls, fountains of youth, and colorful rain. One of my favorite reads in the past few days.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much for your glowing review, I really appreciate it! I am glad it brought you into the scene, I always love when people are able to envision it as I do.

[micky]

I think this piece is beautiful and it is a nice perspective. Well done Ashira:)

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks Micky!

[Marie]

THis is a very pretty and movingpoem. I love your imagry of water as it parallels with th past,

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you Marie. We usually see it as flowing forward, so I thought I would try something different. =)

[Sindu]

I understood it better after I read the author's note. Then the picture sprung up of who exactly is talking in that caring voice. beautifully penned. If this has a tune along with an instrument and an animated comic, I think we are good to go :)

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks Sindu, I am glad you liked it. I will try to find a song that fits.

[Sindu]

Welcome :)

[Kieta!]

Your description and the words you use are so beautiful! I'm so jealous! Great job!!

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much!

[Einstein Noodle]

i think this could come from other perspectives as well .. but i read it after reading your note so was enjoying thoughts and images of my own two daughters ... (i have two sons also; but would not put a flower behind their ears .. it would take root and sprout a field of them) .. my youngest daughter was always dancing in the rain and splashing in puddles ... so i especially thought of her .. perhaps i will give her a call :)
i think your poem is beautiful .. i was immersed in the images and feelings it conjures in me .. so good job says i!
E.

[Ashira Macy]

Aw, thank you Noodle, that is so sweet. Lol, it would take root in your sons' hair huh? Sounds a lot like my brother. =P

[Coyote Poetry]

You had me at the title. My two favorite things. Water and wildflowers. The good description too me to good places and visions. I need a few years near the sea. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks so much Coyote, I am glad you liked it!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Avinash]

From font to words to every turn and twist and stanza it has innocence embedded in it. Enjoyed the journey to your dream world. It is quite exquisite. Thanks a lot for inviting.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much my friend, I am glad you saw the innocence!

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

This has very pretty imagery, so colorful. I wouldn't have known this was a father's perspective if you did not say this in your Authors note, but it still has a nice touch to it and I can see where you were trying to go with it now. I did figure that this person was dear to their heart and finding joy seeing the person dancing even after all of their pain or what not.

Good Job

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much Peace Keeper, I am so happy that you enjoyed it!

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

^^ You're welcome

[Frieda P]

I love a poem of wildflowers, add water and I'm in instant fan, it's a charming read, and once I read your authors note it made it all the more poignant.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you dear Frieda, I am glad it appealed to you.