October Sky

For my best friend Cynthia for her birthday.

As the sun sinks

Behind those distant,

Unnamed hills

My mind falls into

Reverie inspired

Of tangerine golden,

Cloud kissed October Sky.

 

Swimming back…

          Back…

              Backwards…

In time

To those Samhains we spent

Communing with spirits

And French-tricking

Neighbors for treats.

 

Now we whisper

Our wishes through

Fruit flavored smoke

In prayer that our

Matching jade hearts

Will be a set again

Soon.

Author's Note

Enjoy =)

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

aaaaaaawwwwwww! what a fine tribute to your friend .. i actually really like the font and color! it works with the theme quite well says i ... thoroughly appreciate the reference to the Celts .. :) and i am equally intrigued by "...French-tricking" .. guess i shall go a googling to see what i can find .. your poem captured and held me ... for me the change to action in
"Swimming back…

Back…

Backwards…
is wonderful .. felt the drifting so comfortably!
very enjoyable read for me!
E.

[Ashira Macy]

I am happy to see that you found most of my little secrets in this work, almost like a detective looking for clues. I am afraid you probably won't find anything on Google for "French-tricking", as only a few people I grew up with would understand the reference off the bat. Thank you as always for your wonderful review my friend!

[Saddam]

Cloud kissed October Sky.
Swimming back…
Back…
Backwards…

Enjoyed reading it dear..................

[Tse]

A sweet poem! I am sure your lucky friend would have been so glad reading this piece!
For me , the magic moment in your poem was -
"Swimming back…
Back…
Backwards…"
These lines kind of pushed me back into the memories of my Besties where we had spend a lot of great moments together!
And these lines-

"Now we whisper
Our wishes through
Fruit flavored smoke"

Makes us feel that though we are not near now , yet prayers would always keep us together ! And the last lines clearly show how much you wanna be with your besty!
Wonderful piece! Thanks for sharing this ! Gud day !

[Rocky Morgan]

A very creative piece of poetry and the color matches too:)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

so sweet and beautiful!!
love the treatment and presentation..........!!
friends make everything worthwhile!
amazing poem!!
i loved it!!
:)

[Bright Ocean Star]

I loved the flow and easy, breezy, fun October trick or treating inspired feel of this one. It had friendship and great memories stamped all over it. Great write!

[AprilRN1210]

can feel the sweet, nostalgic tone in this one.. enjoyed some of the phrasing and imagery.. one place I tripped a little was..

"Of tangerine golden,
Cloud kissed October Sky."... the "of" there.. not sure.. but flows better in my head with "by".. and "skies" instead of sky.. but again.. my head.. my opinion.. just sharing..

like the "french-trickling".. made me smile.. the thought.. the way you worded it..

was a sweet write for an obviously dear friend.. could feel the pleasant affectionate tone throughout.. well done girl..

[AprilRN1210]

*tricking*... usually WC eats my words, this time added new ones.. ha!... my luck.. technologically challenged as it is.. grrrrr

[Sophy Freebirds]

Awww.. i wish i would have a bestie like you :) a really sweet piece of cake for your lovely.friend. hope she enjoys it. As i did love it. May god bless you both and your friendship

~Sophy

[Ashira Macy]

Aw thank you Sophy! I hope she does too! I am so glad you liked it dear! =)

[RAOrourke]

What a beautiful birthday gift to give your friend! Beautifully penned with wonderful and vivid imagery that came to mind as I soaked in your poem! Well done!

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much, I am glad you enjoyed it!

[Mayank]

looks like the weather is beautiful there and it helped you to shape those lovely words.

[Ashira Macy]

There was a beautiful October sunset not too long ago that inspired this along with memories of my best friend. Sometime two very different things mesh well together. Glad you enjoyed it!

[Frozen Eyes]

I smell autumn.. I smell october.. i smell lil bit of halloween too.. good goin gal :)

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much dear!