October Sky

October Sky

A Poem by Ashira Macy
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For my best friend Cynthia for her birthday.

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As the sun sinks

Behind those distant,

Unnamed hills

My mind falls into

Reverie inspired

Of tangerine golden,

Cloud kissed October Sky.

 

Swimming back…

          Back…

              Backwards…

In time

To those Samhains we spent

Communing with spirits

And French-tricking

Neighbors for treats.

 

Now we whisper

Our wishes through

Fruit flavored smoke

In prayer that our

Matching jade hearts

Will be a set again

Soon.

© 2014 Ashira Macy


Author's Note

Ashira Macy
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aaaaaaawwwwwww! what a fine tribute to your friend .. i actually really like the font and color! it works with the theme quite well says i ... thoroughly appreciate the reference to the Celts .. :) and i am equally intrigued by "...French-tricking" .. guess i shall go a googling to see what i can find .. your poem captured and held me ... for me the change to action in
"Swimming back…

Back…

Backwards…
is wonderful .. felt the drifting so comfortably!
very enjoyable read for me!
E.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

5 Years Ago

I am happy to see that you found most of my little secrets in this work, almost like a detective loo.. read more



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Cloud kissed October Sky.
Swimming back…
Back…
Backwards…

Enjoyed reading it dear..................

Posted 5 Years Ago


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A sweet poem! I am sure your lucky friend would have been so glad reading this piece!
For me , the magic moment in your poem was -
"Swimming back…
Back…
Backwards…"
These lines kind of pushed me back into the memories of my Besties where we had spend a lot of great moments together!
And these lines-

"Now we whisper
Our wishes through
Fruit flavored smoke"

Makes us feel that though we are not near now , yet prayers would always keep us together ! And the last lines clearly show how much you wanna be with your besty!
Wonderful piece! Thanks for sharing this ! Gud day !



Posted 5 Years Ago


A very creative piece of poetry and the color matches too:)

Posted 5 Years Ago


so sweet and beautiful!!
love the treatment and presentation..........!!
friends make everything worthwhile!
amazing poem!!
i loved it!!
:)

Posted 5 Years Ago


I loved the flow and easy, breezy, fun October trick or treating inspired feel of this one. It had friendship and great memories stamped all over it. Great write!

Posted 5 Years Ago


can feel the sweet, nostalgic tone in this one.. enjoyed some of the phrasing and imagery.. one place I tripped a little was..

"Of tangerine golden,
Cloud kissed October Sky."... the "of" there.. not sure.. but flows better in my head with "by".. and "skies" instead of sky.. but again.. my head.. my opinion.. just sharing..

like the "french-trickling".. made me smile.. the thought.. the way you worded it..

was a sweet write for an obviously dear friend.. could feel the pleasant affectionate tone throughout.. well done girl..

Posted 5 Years Ago


AprilRN1210

5 Years Ago

*tricking*... usually WC eats my words, this time added new ones.. ha!... my luck.. technologically .. read more
Awww.. i wish i would have a bestie like you :) a really sweet piece of cake for your lovely.friend. hope she enjoys it. As i did love it. May god bless you both and your friendship

~Sophy

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

5 Years Ago

Aw thank you Sophy! I hope she does too! I am so glad you liked it dear! =)
What a beautiful birthday gift to give your friend! Beautifully penned with wonderful and vivid imagery that came to mind as I soaked in your poem! Well done!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

5 Years Ago

Thank you so much, I am glad you enjoyed it!
looks like the weather is beautiful there and it helped you to shape those lovely words.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

5 Years Ago

There was a beautiful October sunset not too long ago that inspired this along with memories of my b.. read more
I smell autumn.. I smell october.. i smell lil bit of halloween too.. good goin gal :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

5 Years Ago

Thank you so much dear!

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Added on October 17, 2014
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Tags: Halloween, Samhain, birthday, October, fall

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Ashira Macy
Ashira Macy

Martinez, CA



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