Pan

No, not Peter Pan. =)

Gazing electricity

Through the darkened,

Humid room

While questions stutter

From her lips

And laughter rolls

Off of him in waves.

Not processing the what

Or the why,

Just the who.

All that counts,

Is they are kindred

Soul-searchers.

Author's Note

I feel like my writing is just getting more and more abstract. Either way, enjoy.

Reviews

[Christopher Robin]

With a woman only described as 'stuttering' and a man described only as 'laughing' for some reason this put me in the mind of lovers in a mental asylum, the pure, crazed innocence of not questioning anything but what they see in front of them.
Very tickled, as Pan would be.

-Robin

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my! the abstraction is wicked and intoxicating .. really like this poem of yours .. i think it is perfect!
it keeps me puzzling no matter how many times i read it .. so good!
E.

[Matching Socks]

The other Pan, very dark and wicked creature. I can almost see the scene from the movie...
Very nice.

[Lyn Anderson]

Interesting. Pan creeps me out, so I took this a little darkly.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

there is an abstractness yes, but it is delightful. It allows us our own journey as readers...
nicely done, although after seeing the title, i was keeping an eye out for Tinker Bell...but then she and Peter were soul searchers in a way.

i guess we all are.

[Sindu]

Either way, I enjoyed :D So much emotion, tension and cute cameradrie here Ashira..
I loved it :D

[Pushkar Prabhat]

i love abstract.......i try to write abstract......
this was fantastic.....!
beautifully done!!
i loved it!!!
:)

[micky]

I really love this piece Ashira :)

[Rene Salinas]

I welcome your abstraction Ashira I think I have never learned any other way to share. Ha! When I finished reading it felt like one of those moments when one reaches a conclusion. Enough of all the intellectualism trying to fragment every Atom of creativity or unite to achieve fission or fusion or thought. Sick of it as it then you throw it off - boards and suddenly you open your eyes and you are there with someone else united in simplicity.

Wondering why oh why do I make things so complicated

Thankyou

[Sanjh]

It's beautiful, short and really expressive...
Thank you for sharing...:)