Twisted in wonderland

 

 

  Pulled myself up off the ground

 

 look around everything is not what it seems

 

 dizzy and I hit the ground again

 

 Can't take it all in

 

 where I am

 

 everything seems to be huge

 

 and I feel so small

 

 walking around seems like forever

 

 then I run right into a funny looking man

 

 while we hit the ground his hat tumbles of his head

 

 pick up his the huge hat, and say I am sorry

 

 he never he replies but jumps into a song

 

 has this guy lost is mind

 

 something smashes into the tree

 

right next to my head

 

a funny looking creature has just threw a little teacup

 

need to get out of this crazy place

 

 whisper of Alice I hear since I got here

 

I yell out for no one to hear but myself

 

 that Alice is not my name

 

the funny looking man took my hand

 

you better run  you better hide

 

get out quick before the evil queen

 

takes your head...

 

don't sleep, don't stop,

 

there is no escape

 

just keep running

 

with a burst of laughter

 

the funny looking man, and funny creature

 

disappear.

 

and I started to run

Reviews

[afra]

its like a scene which you have described in a poem ...any way great write

[darkness*star1985]

thank you. i am very pleased that you like this poem..

[Marissa]

this is nice.

[darkness*star1985]

thank you so very much

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good re-make of a old story. In the original form. I believe story was more scary then fun. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[darkness*star1985]

Thank you so much for reading this and my other works, i so very much appreciate it. thank you again

[Skye]

I love Alice in Wonderland! Its one of my favorite books and movies. Your poem is wonderful, I like it alot. I think you got the feel of the fantasy down just perfect!

[darkness*star1985]

Thank you

[Wondering Mind]

The wonders of the mind!
Alice was a fine Mathematician, now I bet you didn't know that!! :)
A nice fantasy trip

[darkness*star1985]

thank you

[♥ Lexii Boo &hea..]

i really do like this i just think you get lost sometimes but it is still great you show improvement and i hope to see more

[darkness*star1985]

thank you

[♥ Lexii Boo ♥]

no problemo

[Wild Willow Blue]

I love this. Really made me think back on the story. I was reminded of a TV movie version of this, I once saw. It was rather dark, which is how I read it here. great job.

[darkness*star1985]

thank you so much that is what i was going for

[asdarkeyesclose]

i loved the alice slant to this, the idea of wonderland but kind of mad-edged. stunning.

[darkness*star1985]

thank you

[~Lizzy♬]

This was a great poem. The fantasy element you engulfed into this poem was excellent. I loved the way you incorporated Alice in Wonderland into this too. Wonderful! :)

~Lizzy~

[darkness*star1985]

Thank you

[~Lizzy♬]

You're welcome! :)

[Remyyy]

i love alice in wonderland, so i really enjoyed this one!

[darkness*star1985]

Thank you