Tears and a Diamond in the Rough

A cycle ends All falls apart And from the ashes Perhaps a brand new start...

Out of the darkness, out of the blue

I see a sparkle shining through

Amidst the chaos and depression

A brighter side comes into session

And while I thought that all was lost

A brand new goal has come across

In the rough and scattered still

Newborn thoughts to plan at will

An old passion and expression

Might become a new obsession

One so difficult to conquer

Be it worth the try I wonder

Yet if it keeps my mind at ease

I choose this load as my disease

Cause what I have cannot be cured

A pain too wrenching to endure

A pain of loss an aching heart

A bleeding soul left torn apart...

But let's not speak of this again

Ignore them thoughts within my head

And if pretending fails my disguise

I'll wipe my love for you away from my eyes...

Reviews

[forgotten_ghosts]

This poem flows fluently and therefore it is really good to read. While I first read it I did not notice that the lyrical subject is refering to love until I came to vers 17 and 18. That's when I got suspicious. After reading it again I kind of recognize my own life 3 years ago, falling in love, losing the one you love.. But eventually everything will turn out to be great.
Great poem

[AClockworkGirl]

This poem flows really well through the middle. The intent and feeling of the piece is very clear. The first line is a little cliche for my taste ("Out of the darkness, out of the blue"). Also, I'm not sure what is meant by the last two lines: "And if pretending fails my disguise I'll wipe my love for you away from my eyes..."

[The AshKat Projects]

the last two lines refer to the fact that despite the effort to stay busy with sth new in order to not think about what hurts the most, the truth is that the thoughts are always there thus feeling horrible. And still there is a constant pretence that all is fine,through a pretend smile or responding to anyone with the phrase "all is good" etc thus the "disguise". however, sometimes, this disguise fails and "my love for you" AKA tears start to come out and then all that can be done is wipe them away...