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Unrequited Love

Would it be wrong to capture your laughter in my memory?

With each ounce of my being, I suffer without you knowing.

I never told you how I felt,

For a barrier has come between us,

Just a tap of wind separates what's left

Loving you shouldn't be this painful,

But slowly, I start to fade 

Silently,

My eyes whispered the words; 

I love you,

Instantly, you smiled in my direction,

and I, too,

do the same,

Would it be wrong to capture your laughter in my memory?

With each ounce of my being, I suffer without you knowing.

Author's Note

Written on March 22, 2023, at 4:33 PM, I honestly can't write a decent poem these days'

Reviews

[Aura]

I find this piece to be so beautiful, the idea of unrequited love. It is honestly so painful, to have feelings for someone only for them to not have a clue, the agony! And being apart from them is like torture because all you're thinking about is them and the memories you had with them. I like the presentation of your poem as well, the spaces, italics, really nicely presented! You say this isn't decent??? I find this unique! Thanks for sharing, I enjoyed reading!

[AssonanceWriter]

Awwh! >.< You're so sweet! This truly made me happy today!

[Aura]

I'm glad it did! 🙂

[Planet x]

This one is one of my favorite by you

Loving you shouldn't be this painful,
But slowly, I start to fade

You write about seperation but not in the usual pain that comes with it, you accept it, like you watch it from a distance maybe some time passed and you can accept it without the immidiate pain?

[AssonanceWriter]

Sometimes it's better to be the one in pain than to see the person you love go through the pain (:read moreSometimes it's better to be the one in pain than to see the person you love go through the pain (:
Thank you for reading, John.

[Planet x]

It is true

[TitaniumStar]

I liked the spacing and the thought of the eyes saying 'I love you'. Been there. lol *thumbs up* Nice job!

[AssonanceWriter]

Awh, thanks love