FlyGirl

A poem for my good friend "Switchkraft".......you'll find her personal profile on

 

FLY GIRL

She's the fever
You simply can't shake
Sporting spiked chrome boots
Designed to break
The skin of the daring
And the spirit of the meek
Licking voluptuous lips
Shaped to peak
The interest of any who'd dare
Part the black curtain of her satin hair
To take in the
"Kick you in your face" stare
From eyes that will gaze
Right through your being
Defining and dissecting you
And picking you clean

She is acceleration
Standing still
Hard metal chords
Wrap her will
But she's holding back
Feeling constrained
Though once in her world
You'll be trained
To unleash the muse
Live in the moment
Risk the wretched excess
Of indulgence abused

She's wanting more
Than what she sees
Shaken to the core
By what she can be
And the whole lump sum
Of adventures to come
Once she has successfully
Broken free
Of normalcy

You'll have to step fast
To join her ride
Or be aghast
At how quickly the tide

Dries up on you
If you miss the chance
To engage the Fly Girl
In sensual dance

Because she's the goose bumps
You want to feel
Holding the breath
You want to steal
To feed the hunger
That drives her appeal
And ease the pain

When she's out of range
Of your look and touch
When missing her becomes
One sorrow too much
The memory of her
Will cushion your senses
Reassure and strengthen
Your defenses

Because she will always be there
Beyond distance and time
Beyond the frenetic and sublime
And talk and rhyme
Once the Fly Girl is in you
She stays in you
Always

 

 

                                Jamie Shelton

 

Reviews

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

Very good. I can see why are an accomplished writer. I know there are a lot of singers out there that talk about that type of idea; the women who blows your mind. i hope i can be this woman in a man's life one day. also, you are from chicago, i know a lot of peopel from there, they are very taletnted too.

i added you as a friend. welcome to the site!!!

[M. Amphet Salt]

Beautiful usage of structure, imagery words, sensory detail, feeling, and rhyme scheme. Sound like a woman I'd like meet. Daring, bold, and vicious. Good Work, a possible favorite. One thing though there is something about the first stanza. Maybe its to long or could just be me.

[Mark A. Mihalko]

Beyond distance and time
Beyond the frenetic and sublime
And talk and rhyme

That grouping is great! I think it ties the whole thing together tremendously at the end. Great flow and imagery! Outstanding write!

[Ivory]

WOW. I really enjoyed this piece. So vivid and I loved the flow of your words.
Really good write : )