My Forever

My Forever

A Poem by Jordan Smith

My Forever I met
on a cold winter's night

My Forever I met
in a festive forest

My Forever I met
under the night sky

Under the winds of chance,
Under the waves of love

My Forever I met by fate
at the wrong time,
but at the right time

My Forever I met
forever ago & I'm just
now saying Hi.

© 2018 Jordan Smith


Author's Note

Jordan Smith
This poem just came out of the blue and inspired me. I hope you enjoyed it. If so, leave me a critique below with what I could have done better with this. Thanks for reading!

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Hmmm....that's bit blue to feel...but I enjoyed... :)

Few lines are penned heartedly here I feel... that 5th stanza is so correct! The right time is when that forever comes in our life....this novice loved reading it and so no critiques I could decide.....be happy foreva!

Thanks for sharing sir :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jordan Smith

1 Year Ago

Also, you have a beautiful smile :)
Tahsin.Z🍁

1 Year Ago

Oh, thanks a lot!!☺
Jordan Smith

9 Months Ago

You're welcome :)



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I think this poem exemplifies the often futile search for the perfect mate. In my experience, (thrice married) we stumble about, hoping to find the "right one", but end up with one that we hope will do. Perhaps "forever mate" isn't doesn't mean what I think? Anyway, this poem sets my mind a'thinking.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really liked the final stanza. If we are truly interested in that special person in our lives. We will learn something new about them all the time. Thanks for sharing your work here!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jordan Smith

1 Year Ago

I'm glad you enjoyed the poem Tony! This was a good time in my life, but unfortunately did not pan o.. read more
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Rye
Such a short well written write, quite a powerful read

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Jordan Smith

1 Year Ago

Thank you! I am glad that you enjoyed it :) Unfortunately, that relationship has ended. So, back to .. read more
My Forever I met by fate
at the wrong time,
but at the right time
--> favorite

Short but powerful, really enjoyed

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jordan Smith

1 Year Ago

Thank you Brandon! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I enjoyed writing this one at the time.
I've read some of your writing and your poems, and I absolutely love it! This poem is really nice!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jordan Smith

1 Year Ago

Thank you Olivia! I'm glad you enjoy my writing!
"Under the winds of chance,
Under the waves of love."

Loved this stanza!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jordan Smith

1 Year Ago

Thank you Amanda! I'm glad you enjoyed it. That's one of my favorite stanzas I have ever written
Whimsical and - in a strange way, wise; knowing how-when.. then, time turning 'pon time! Just long enough to beckon readers.. ending with a contented smile!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jordan Smith

9 Months Ago

Thank you emmajoy! Sorry i'm just now responding to this lol
emmajoy

9 Months Ago

Is fine, am smiling a bonus!
beautiful poem Jordan (: I love your lines,
"My Forever I met
forever ago and I'm just
now saying hi"
lovely lines and great flow-truly from the heart...im sure during that time of forever ago, their was deep longing. lol I don't know. forever for some could be a simple gaze or a few days, maybe even an hour. anyway, thank you for sharing your work my friend (:
I enjoyed it!
-A

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jordan Smith

1 Year Ago

I'm glad you enjoyed it Angelina :) Yeah, it was a simple gaze lol that's all it took. Love at first.. read more
It's all about the timing. :)
"Hi" is a great place to begin.
This is pretty cool in that it could be interpreted as romantic or a finding of one's own self. Anyway, nice poem.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Romantic and full of imagery. Nicely composed.

Chris

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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