Dance with Me?

Look at me?

Oh please just look my way.

You come in late and sit, now I wish you'd always stay.

My heart pulls in your direction, ignoring does no good.

So I ask you to a dance, tho I doubt you ever would.

Mischief dances in your eyes as you stare into my own.

Look at me...and show me love I've never known.

 
Dance with me?

While we share this festive night.

Lead me to the dance floor, music our only time.

I've known you just for moments, now forever's on my mind.

The stars take the form of fireflies; the swirling twirling kind.

Your eyes look so piercing, I'm afraid to stare too close.

But won't you dance with me...before the sun becomes our host.


Walk with me?

Down this path I've never been.

Swear I'm the only girl and I'll tease of other men.

Take me in your arms and steal a kiss when no one sees.

Promise to protect me as you scare away the bees.

Murmur soft and low while tucking flowers in my hair.

Won't you walk with me...while we're young, and gay, and fair.


Vow with me?

In this church beneath the trees.

I walk between our families, yet it's only you I see.

Take my hand in yours, and raise it to your lips;

Preachers says that's cheating for it's not yet time to kiss.

Smiling a wicked smile you'll say you've tasted it before.

Won't you vow with me..."for richer or for poor".


Strive with me?

As we face this world together.

If I cry when baby grows, swear I'm still lite as a feather.

Share with me your nightmares so I'll tell you of my fears.

Laugh and tell me "it's ok" when I cover you in tears.

I don't care about the presents; tell me secrets in their stead.

Will you strive with me...'til the earth becomes our bed.


Sit with me?

When it's all that's left to do

Since the day the children left; I saw you crying too.

Our voices getting soft and our gray is showing stronger.

I worry when you hurt; you joke, "We don't got much longer".

Our lives now slow but meaningful, our love that hasn't waned.

Please sit with me...and call me lovely once again.


Stay with me?

As my eyes blur with the these tears.

You lie so still and quiet as you talk about our years.

When you fell in love with me the day I asked you for a dance.

How my laugh had sealed your fate;  "You didn't give me much of a chance".

You wink then murmur softly of my pretty braided hair...

Oh please...please just stay with me...I need you more than I can bear.


Look at me?

Please just touch me one last time?

Hold me in your arm and tell me that you're mine.

Cover me in kisses 'fore the earth can cover you.

Brush away these tears just like you always used to do.

Gaze into my eyes as you twirl me 'round these stones.

Because, since before that day you looked, I've never been so alone.

 

Author's Note

I know the rhyming is pretty horrific and the wording elementary, but then actual rhyming poems have never been my strong-suit. I honestly only like the last stanza...

Update: I just got finished reading over all the reviews and would like to say thank you to everyone who has contributed so far. You have given more meaning and beauty to this piece than I ever did. Your insights and comments are treasured. ^-^

Reviews

[Honeypot]

Ah, you're not giving yourself enought credit with this one. Its a wonderful story of love's progression and the way it evolves, but remains strong. Its very moving, especially the last stanza. Very sad, but still full of love - the undying kind that stays with you for life and maybe beyond. Its a very good job!

[Through the Gateway]

This is such a lovely piece! The desire to find the truest of all loves as we live entire lives in the eyes of someone we've just met. How many times have we lived and re-lived an entire life in the depths of another's eyes we know in name only?

A very heartfelt piece. Very well written!

[Marie Anzalone]

A beautiful poem of longing from one who wishes to know the depths of truest love- and understands the commitment it takes to get there. I wonder if sometimes we commit in our minds before we've even determined if the person is compatible with us, or will make a good partner? "Dance with me", we say, while in our minds we already are asking how their last name fits with ours! Yet the final stanza seems to be saying that you do have the patience to wait for it, and the rest could be read as a longing, not an expectation.

I thought this was actually very well written. You have a way with words that transports the reader into another level, another plane, into the secret world of the heart. Very good, indeed.

[Fanciful Goddess]

BEAUTIFUL!!!! Very inspiring. I want love like that!!!! I love the story in the poem.(^_^)

[Michael]

across the way
face to face
staring back
looking ahead
possibilities endless

lifetime in a blink
energy in a twirl
to love, be in love
all starts somewhere

so walk, jump, start, begin again...

Almost like a song, I did enjoy it though as its been said... there's always time to do it again.

[Babbette Francis]

Wow, such sad beauty...
This was just stunning and so well thought out. I also Loved the last stanza, but the rest the poem really gave it life. This was beautiful!

[bluessadmood]

Oh this is so sweet..
Look my way,its never too late,wish you d stay,take me to dance floor ,music is our time
Your gaze too strong cant stare too long,Walk with me down this path I ve never been
Take me in your arms and steal a kiss,protect me and scare away the bees
Strife with me and we face the world together,share your nightmares ,i tell my fears
Please touch me one more time ,hold me in your arms and tell me you are mine
cover me with kisses ,brush the tears away..look into my eyes
since that day you looked into them,I have never felt alone
lovely write..

[turtlegirlluver]

I don't think the rhyming or or words got in the way at all, this poem was from the heart, which makes the poem wonderful. There was so much longing and passion and love that filled your poem along with many other emotions that helps strengthen the piece. I enjoyed how you went through the years and what would happen in those years. A very good write! You have a lot of talent!

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on your great winning poem

[Stephanie]

This was a beautiful, touching poem about love- how it grows on us, and then ends up leaving so quickly once life is over. It was truly amazing and I'm sure a few have shed tears reading this. I had a few "aww" moments myself. Magnificent job :)

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on your winning poem. Well done, great write!