The Fate of Eve

Brittle locks whip limply in the wind. The tower has crumbed but it's too late.

Ravens pluck at her bloodless flesh.

Where is her lover?

He's forgotten to rescue her...

 

Broken form lies torn apart on the roadside. All in vain for her father has died.

Wolves feed on the horse as the final petal drops.

Where is her prince?

He's forgotten to save her...

 

Waves beat mercilessly against the shriveled body. A wide empty hole where the heart had been.

Crabs dig deeper, burying the evidence in the sand.

Where is her knight?

He's forgotten to love her...

 

Stiff, cold, dusty and finally dead. A thousand loveless years have stopped her heart.

Spiders do their best to mask the horror of the corpse.

Where is her savior?

He's forgotten to kiss her...

 

Pearlized fingers curled around a rotten apple. The lovely and empty lie believed.

Rats sip the sticky juice that drips from her lips.

Where is her hero?

He's forgotten to warn her...

 

 

...This is the fate of Eve...

 

 

 

Author's Note

The challenge was to take a Fairytale and rewrite the ending where it is anything but happy.
My own interpretation of what the fate of a few heroines of fairy-lore might have been had their princes and lovers been less than heroic.


*For long over due clarification, Eve's fate is abandonment in a time of need, not the acceptance of her being a figment of fairy tales.

Reviews

[Legion]

Wow! Wow! Wow! and another Wow! Heck, I'll even spell it backwards for you...Wow! This is totally awesome. Such imagery, angst, and darkness. Brilliantly done. I think you might like my piece "Blood of the Scarecrow" or perhaps "Lilith Discarded: The Aftermath". You have a great talent. This is going in my favorites.

[Coyote Poetry]

A sad and powerful tale in this poem. I like how you told the story in the poem. Photo gave life to the words. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[jessicamarie19]

Wow - this is awesome writing. I didn't quite grasp it the first time through, but after reading your note I loved it even more. Nice work!

[Xfaerie corpseX]

holy s**t that was f*****g amazing.
i loved it.
majorly.
enter it in something, get it published. for real.
simply amazing

[Unwelcomeguest]

The brothers Grim not grim enough for you? I enjoyed this poem to my core and I think this poem really shows how much you can rely on heroes in the modern day. It's certainly taught me a little bit of independance

[Colin Stewart]

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[S. Liberace]

this is a really lovely poem! i really enjoyed the words you used and how you used them, as well as the twist of several different faery tales combined in one poem. i spent like 5 minutes trying to figure out which one was supposed to be whom. this is really excellent!

[Jen Marks]

Awesome.
Nice use of repetition.
I really like your imagination! :)

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[funeralmoon]

this was awesome. i love when people put a twist on fariytale stuff it makes it very interesting...

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Congratulations for winning the loveless-fairytale contest!

[HoWiE]

'Spiders do their best to mask the horror of the corpse' - what a great line! I really liked this piece. I'm not a poetry kind of guy but I enjoyed this. It had a sort of decayed, wasteland kind of feel to it where clearly everything is lost and there is no hope for anything. I enjoyed especially the outlook that heroes are sometimes less than heroic or are simply unable to complete what valuable quest they have been assigned. This is true of a lot of things, nothing is black or white anymore, not even fairy tale.

And kudos for posting Adam & Eve as a fairytale!! Hopefully in a couple of thousand years people will be worshipping my novel as an account of what has passed (what a crock!)

Thanks for posting this, an interesting and absorbing piece.
Cheers!