Secundum Sublecio

Posted as a response to a poem by a friend Luke Prater who is also now on here. The womans standpoint to post coitus :)

The afterglow of intercourse burns gold,
entangled limbs in tenderness retreat
elation’s warmth cannot be oversold,

orgasmic undulations uncontrolled
this room cocooned, all else is obsolete
the afterglow of intercourse burns gold,

each cell is spent in effort, now we mould
to one again, in stillness of the beat
elations warmth cannot be oversold,

in quiet time emotions here unfold
two bodies pressed in more enticing heat,
the afterglow of intercourse burns gold,

for moments, I am beautiful and bold
this body gives up quaking in defeat
elation’s warmth cannot be oversold,

no words are needed, stories yet untold
just lay with me upon this crumpled sheet
the afterglow of intercourse burns gold,
elation’s warmth cannot be oversold.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Very powerful and strong description. When the body is content and is simmering after great pleasure. Hard to describe. You did. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Richard Williams]

A very fine Villanelle, powerfully put with beautiful phrasing and intimate description.

[M Garcia]

Very nice. Sensual. Sexy and sweet at the same time. Great work!

[Julie Watkins]

Stunningly sensual villanelle Shân. The refrain lines in a villanelle have to be damn good to sustain the theme throughout the piece without the repetition being overwhelming but the non-refrain lines are equally important in building/layering the theme. When a poet gets it right, as you have here, the musicality of the piece lifts right off the page and caresses the reader, well it does this one anyway....maybe it's a 'Welsh' thing ;)

'this body gives up quaking in defeat' - hell girl - I so wish I'd written that line!

[L]

Love this response to my Coitus Non Circum on the male take on the act of sex/love-making. Very intelligently-written, emotive and sensual villanelle Ms Ellis. I shall have to post mine now!

[Christi Moon]

very passionate villanelle Shan! well done!

[Nobody]

Form, content - perfect! I like you've chosen this form for such a sensual write.

[Ruth]

Excellent stand too..a woman's perspective is always different huh? lol
Well voiced love and interesting to wander through xx