Secrets

The days went fast at school, we had heaps of assignments due, so I didn't have any time for boys. This year was our last, and graduation was only a month away. I was so excited! I skipped into Maths class, and slouched onto one of the chairs. Only four hours left of school, I reminded myself smiling.

Erik sat next to me today, he was one of my best guy friends, he had shaggy blonde hair, and green eyes, in my opionion he was good looking, but Hamish was better. Erik is like a brother to me, when I'm sad he's always there for me, and I love him.

"How's you and Hamish going?" He asked shyly.

"Great, I think..."

"What's wrong?"

"I think he's keeping things from me..." I sighed.

"What do you mean?"Confused, he asked.

"He went out somewhere the other day, and never told me where... I think that maybe he might be seeing someone else..."

"Ofcourse not! Why would he? You're a smart, pretty, cute, beautiful, and caring girl! He could never get better then you.. and if it is true, then you're to good for him."

"Thanks Erik." I smiled.

Erik was different from most guys, he was gay, and that's what I liked about him, he actully didn't call me those words to try and get with me, he says them because he thinks they're true, and that's what's really sweet about him.

"So how are you and Lucas?" I teased.

"Perfect, perfect!" He chuckled loudly. "Things are just great!"

"That's great.."I smiled. All of a sudden I didn't want to be here, didn't want to talk to anyone... I felt sick, ill, depressed.

I looked at Erik with a blankeless look.

"Um... Eva? You look kinda sick, you should go home..."

I just nodded, and ran out the class room. What was wrong with me?!

When I got home I spewed up in the toilet. What? Spew? No... this can't be happening I thought. Immortals can never get sick, and they can never die. So why is this happening? Unless.. Oh s**t! I gasped, It can't be...!

Author's Note

Okay, so this chapter is a bit crazy, but get use to it, this is just how I am, and if you don't like my writing, then don't read it.

Reviews

[Rain]

she's pregnant...so they did IT...O_O
lol...
hehe, i wonder wat will happen nxt...
i wonder if the new charater Erik will appear more in this book...

[Aynsley]

She is, don't worry :)

[FairyTalePrincess]

Wow, is she pregnant? I was wondering if so..
If she is, then Woah! Suprise.. I hope she's okay.

[KeSha]

S**t! PREGO! noo.. ;) Yay lil mini versions of e'm . Cwuutee.

[Dorryy]

Eep! Gay? Lol just kidding.
It's nice to have "Just friends" :)

[Aynsley]

Haha, ooh, my mum used my account to comment. Rebal! Thanks mummy ;)

[WayOath]

Oh my god, I think she may be pregnant. That is totally unfair because I never got to read one of those explicit scenes. Or unless, like Dale says on King of the Hill "Aliens came in the night and inpregnated my wife while I was gone away!" I love Dale Gribble, my favorite cartoon character. Any how, this chapter was like a hook. The reader fell into the bait at the end and was forced to draw their own conclusions seeing as there are no more chapters yet! Anyhow, my critique here is to advise you to work on chapter length. Don't get me wrong, chapters do not have a certain length. But, with the way you are writing this piece there should be more in each chapter. This is a fast paced novel, true, but we need more of the story! We need more reaction! We need more detail on the characters in this girls life and so on and so forth. Great story so far! Ready to read more! PLEASE LET ME KNOW WHEN THERE IS MORE UP.

Love,
XWayOathX

[Aynsley]

your noval is amazing, all the chapters are really interesting and well written, very descriptive and riveting, like need to read more and more to find out what happens. One day you will be a famous writer.xx Love Mum