Boyfriend

Boyfriend

A Poem by Aynsley
"

What it feels like to be in love.

"

Everyday,

side by side,

you were there,

when I cried.

Your hugs so soft,

your kisses so sweet,

you're the only guy,

I need.

Hold me close,

don't let go,

tell me you love me,

and let me know.

Hold my hand,

kiss my hair,

I feel so loved,

when you are near.

Close your eyes,

count to ten,

lean in close,

and be my man.

Kiss my cheeks,

my lips and more,

play with me,

lets explore.

Cuddle me close,

hold me tight,

think about me,

day and night.

Call me up,

on the phone,

lets talk for hours,

all alone.

Pull out a ring,

and pop the question,

there's a really,

great suggestion.

Kneel down low,

put it close,

I say "Yes, now lets toast!"

© 2010 Aynsley


Author's Note

Aynsley
I hope you like this,
I put alot of effort into it. Please review! (:

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I love this :) it had a great flow to it and a certain innocence about it as well ;) Sweet write.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Well to be honest it's the best poem I've read so far today!

:D

Not sure I can make any suggestions on how to improve it...
Other than changing the line "all alone." to "no longer alone"
and that's probably one of my worst suggestions I've ever offered :L


Posted 10 Years Ago


I like it! The words had a way that forced you into imagining, and I loved the innocent tone!! The flow wasn't as great as I would've liked, but don't mind me. Lovely poem. Keep going!

Posted 10 Years Ago


When I read this, you've pulled in into an outer body experience with your concise, but accurate way to bring me into the poem.
It has an innocence to it that causes me to think fantasy, but a reality to it that makes me think "I can see this happening".
Great job Anysley!

Posted 10 Years Ago


aww very sweet poem. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


It has a very comforting tone to it. I like poems that seems to express a persons fantasy world and bring to other people. Not saying that this is fantasy because it can very well happen. I mean fantasy as in the traditional fairytale happy endings that make people laugh and cry and just feel good inside that everything is alright. good peom!

Posted 10 Years Ago


This is a sweet poem, but I think that you could smooth out a couple of lines to help the flow a bit. Otherwise, nice job.

Posted 10 Years Ago


I like it, but I think "Yes, now lets toast!" should be its own line. It would go better with the flow you've established through the poem. Otherwise, very cute, great work :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Aw cute, lovely transition from boyfriend to Fiancee

Posted 10 Years Ago


wonderfully crafted poetic of devotion and love and hope~

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Aynsley

Sunshine Coast, Maroochydore, Australia



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