In the Desert

In the desert,

            The parched sand

Indicative of my throat

In the forest,

            Moisture pooled on my tongue-

            Akin to the leaves

The sea…

            The sea deceived me

Reviews

[emmajoygreen]

Surely the endless movement of sea or ocean fascinates the more than average viewer. Can sit, stand or crouch and watch q great expanse of lqiuid near breathing - its mighty chest going hell for leather, keeping one wither alert or - depending on mood, relaxed, at peace.. mesmerized. Have slept overnight in the desert, have splept on quite a few beaches.. there is a vast difference.. yet the surroundings can make infinity closer. Your words conjur here, take one other than at the screen.

[Brad Dehler]

Thank you so much Emma. Yes, there is so much more there. I enjoyed reading your expansive insight of the poem :)

[willweb]

Wow, that was way too cool. Just the thoughts that flow in this, the comparisons, the depth of the feelings. I am rambling here but it is the fault of this poem. not me. I will be back to read more.

[Brad Dehler]

Heartfelt thank you. Double "cool" vote. I appreciate you. Really happy this has positive impact for you :)

[Brianna Brie]

The sea offers many depths as it is deep and dark. The salt water would parch you like the desert. Yet, the shear mass of water seems to want to water you like the leaves amongst the forest. Deception for sure! Enjoyed this thought provoking write.

[Brad Dehler]

You are much appreciated. I hope for people to find it thought provoking. Thank you for being so keen and giving me the time :)

[Chris Shaw]

The sea is incredibly moody. More so than the desert or forest. I liked this descriptive piece and its imagery, very much. Thank you for posting.

Chris

[Brad Dehler]

Thank you Chris!!

[Zoe Richardson]

Oh yes... the sea. The sea is quite deceptive. I recommend mountains. They've served me well. This is a well written musing on nature, as well as something deeper. As deep, perhaps, as forest silence and sea itself.

[Brad Dehler]

Thank you Zoe! I agree with you... Now I'm heading to the mountains!

[andrew mitchell]

In the desert is an ocean we crave for but can never reach - the mirage. Nice writing.

[Brad Dehler]

Thank you sir Andrew

[jacob erin-cilberto]

deception...that oasis that becomes a mirage...
love can parch the heart.
j.

[Brad Dehler]

Yes sir! thank you Mr Jacob!

[Veronica Staehle]

I like how you took me on a quick journey with an unexpected end—realizing we didn’t go anywhere at all except through your desert’s mirage.

Clever and succinct.

[Brad Dehler]

Thank you Veronica! Very kind of you to say. I appreciate your feedback and I am glad you took that journey, no matter the length.

[alanwgraham]

It is great to be presented with something a bit different Brad. You give us two apt metaphors and then the final one breaks the progression.
Short and sweet,
Alan

[Brad Dehler]

Thank you Alan. Yes, my poetry is raw and I am grateful for its uniqueness. The intricate diction can be challenging to readers

[William Michael Reeves]

Hard to sing through a mouthful of sea. Knowing the salt would kill your song you wisely did not swallow. The thirst leaves a mirage of an oasis, indicating you're not in a forest, but a cafe full of thirsty poets.

Billigami