I Still Sunbathe In The Dirt:.

Haa morgan freeman's voice makes anything sound good.

Scenery of regression is grave

Sunbathing in the dirt like a dog

You enjoy the sun until you remember

The black abyss you created where your suite is always occupied

You can't stomach it

 

After bathing, you stay filthy

You wonder what kinda soap

Can wash away the mess of things you've made

To be something and succeed is

The real need, to grip insanity and say no 

Until then, the filth stains you

 

Then you realize...(Morgan Freeman Voice)

Sunbathing in the dirt is not all that bad

As long as you can still get up

And that's what I did, I got up

Gripped the feel of urgency in the palm of my hand

And ran with it

 

 

Reviews

[The Scholar]

Morgan Freeman voice.... ahahaha.

Nice poem, I like the comparison you make between being physically dirty and figuratively messy, and the wondering what soap could possibly be used to wash away your mess. Appropriate title too.
" to grip insanity and say no, " an interesting line.
And the last lines say it all. As long as you can still get up...true that

[Rosalind Gale]

Very nice and worth getting up to read! Keep going Brandon

Rosa -x-

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Oh ya, it was real hard to get up sometimes but enduring pain brings strength. eventually it gets easier...raises brows eyes rolling :)

[Dean Kuch®]

The last few lines really say it all, ..."As long as you can still get up..." It's hard for all of us at times, I suspect.
And yet, here we are.

[Sleeping Maiden]

ha, this is really unique! i love the two different comparisons. You have a way with your words! =) It makes me think. Wonderful job!

[Leslie Philibert]

Clever, well written piece of writing, and the last verse is with its Morgan Freeman line is massive, original idea, well presented.

[BMColey]

haa as I wrote that last part down I thought out of nowhere....Morgan Freeman voice would go perfect for this lol thanks for reviews everybody! ive enjoyed all of your piece's as well

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

Very good. This one really made me think about whet you wrote, and what you were trying to portray. Excellent

[Kuhr Gred]

GREAT WRITE.. keep it up.. creative moves quickly in your poem
-Kuhr Gred

[just is]

I loved this, so nicely done,
i enjoyed the part of Morgan freeman's voice as well.
Awesome writing

[Layla J Omorose]

I loved the (Morgan Freeman Voice) that part in the line caught me off guard. I think all of us sun bathe in dirt...some in mud. Very good write