My Last Repent

Dark and deep. No rhyme poetry/prose

Silver waters let me lie afloat you,
as I allow your saturation to clothe my naked flesh.
Pull my hair back from my face,
so that I may see the stars above me.

Calm your motion around me
and allow me to meditate in still of night.
Sustain me for just one moment as I reflect on my blessings and curses.

Hold me up with your sea of strength, as I look to the heavens above
and offer up my plea of repentance for what I've done and
allow the bitter of my tears to add to your dazzling power.

Before washing away my sorrows,
so that I will not be found with tear-stained eyes,
I ask that you permit one last repent
for what I am about to do.

My battles of good and evil have weakened my flesh,
forced me to lie upon you and be taken deep into your watery grave
so that I can sin no more.

I readily sacrifice my body to the deep
and trust my soul be saved from the demons that haunt it.


 

Reviews

[Freder Fredersen (aka G..]

Interesting piece.

Although I don't believe I'd want to drown....I'm more a fire person I think. :)

There is much to be said for connecting with the full spectrum of life and death. Praying to an element seems to be somehow fitting. The reverence for water was really cool for me. And demons...well demons make good friends in time. I'm not sure death is a way to defeat them. I think pointing at them and giggling is more effective. Great poem. Got me thinking and emoting on things beyond my usual realm. Thanks.

Cheers!
FF

[deeps]

My battles of good and evil have weakened my flesh,
forced me to lie upon you and be taken deep into your watery grave,
so that I can sin no more.

I readily sacrifice my body to the deep
and trust my soul be saved from the demons that haunt it.

Wow! I loved these lines here
this is so amazing.
This write gripped me
Loved it.

[Honeypot]

This is a pretty powerful piece. I loved this stanza:

Hold me up with your sea of strength, as I look to the heavens above
and offer up my plea of repentance for what I've done and
allow the bitter of my tears to add to your dazzling power.

It speaks to me today. Heck, it yells and screams at me today. Great poem you have here!

[Gheeneil]

Wow! This is a very amazing piece of literature! Cleansing, as we know, is gradual. It goes through certain processes or stages so it may be free from impurities once it has completed the cycle. The flow of your word goes similar to it (the cleansing)---smooth and thorough. I can say that this is written very carefully. A masterpiece. I like it!

[Markymark]

Hmmmmm. Babbette, your musings always intrigue me. If your poetry is ya lit, then you are a jumble of thoughts, deeper than who you think you are. I can't critique work that is better than mine.

Great work Girl.

Markymark

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Holy hell Babbette... amazingly deep and thought provoking... knowing you weaknesses and owning up to them is the key to salvation... just love it.

Hold me up with your sea of strength, as I look to the heavens above
and offer up my plea of repentance for what I've done and
allow the bitter of my tears to add to your dazzling power.

my favorite part of this write though the whole piece is spectacular.

[Kelley]

This was really deep Babbette. I loved how you
almost pleading to be saved from the longing of mortal sin.

Great write as always.

Kelley