Labyrinth of Dreams

Written for a contest. It had to be inspired by the picture and have three stanzas with four lines each. I know it's not great or even good ... but it's what came to me.

A world of beauty shattered,
But in my dreams I see,
Bits and pieces of the world I knew,
Fighting to become free.

 

Elusive dreams, they find me here
Lost and searching in this place.

Where things are scattered, tossed, and torn

And where tears pour down my face.

 

I feel so small trapped in this place

This labyrinth of dreams

I’ve trapped myself here in my mind

Where nothing’s what it seems.

Reviews

[Patrick Henry]

I love it. It's dreamy and this peculiar sense that it may resemble that of the stress that is "Writer's block" to pull ideas and scenes from to help color your poems..... xoxo -Mark

[Bare trees]

I think your being too critical of yourself. This is a fine poem with rhymes that never seem forced and a good story packed in three stanzas. Your a very talented writer from what I've read. I'll be reading your stories next. Great job.

[darkgurl]

I never knew anyone could feel as much as I do as when I read this. You have captivated my heart & soul with this write.

[SM Davis]

Perfect meter! I've been in that labyrinth. A friend it poses not to be most days. beautiful dear one!

[Moonflower]

This was fluid and beautiful, wonderful writing.

[Wondering Mind]

Very nicely expressed and well done with the rhyme, the lines fit in perfectly and each new stanza continued on with the meaning. A sad yet, wonderful write.

[Globy]

like Metallica have said "Sad but true"

Great one!

[Crow]

Wonderful piece, oh so true.

[Seashell]

This is a great piece even although extremely sad. My heart tugged as I read it and feel so very much for the person concerned. If I could hug them....I would.

Thanks for share
Babsie xx oo

[An Ordinary Woman]

I realize this is older but know you still struggle. I'm sorry, friend. Your an awesome person. good things must be headed your way any moment now.