Wildfleour

Wildfleour

A Poem by Ralphy
"

About a friend that I respect

"

Wildfleour

 

 

In the mist of the rainforest

Breaking through the trees

Is a special place

With a mystical breeze

 

The soil so rich

Fit for a king

Deep down are the roots

Crown with an earthen ring

 

The darkness gathers

Around one spot

As the sun shines

So does it lift my heart

 

Out of the ground

Came a shock to me

 a single flower

That fights to be

 

Up she rises

To reach the light

While shadows lash

Into the night

 

The colors are brilliant

The petals many

Curling to witness

The day of plenty

 

She flaunts her colors

For many hours

She is truly a miracle

Her name is Wildfleour

 

 

 

 

 

© 2008 Ralphy


Author's Note

Ralphy
Sometimes, some people need to be Recognized

The photo is licensed to Creative Commons (CC)

I couldn't have written this without the help of Annalisa and JC...Thank you both

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I really liked this, it's a wonderful tribute and whoever this is about is a very special and lucky person to have a friend like you. Technically there are a few things that need to be brushed up. You begin the poem in the present tense, and then in the third stanza you switch to past. Also in the third stanza the way you word things is really awkward, below is a suggestion on how to smooth that out, but other than that this was lovely. cudos.

The darkness has gathered-------------to---------The darkness gathered
Around one spot----------------------------to---------around one spot
As the sun shines--------------------------to---------As the sun shines
That lifted my heart----------------------to---------My heart lifted


Posted 12 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.




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Wonderful poem. Flowed effortless. You have a very special friend there.

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Beautifully written, Ralphy. I loved the beauty you described as well as the strength she possesses to thrive anywhere ... I'm sure your friend was deeply touched by your poem ... Awesome poem! hugs

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Beginnings. For some reason, rebirth to me. I saw so many images; a sapling poking through the last snow, the first signs of a growing garden, new-born baby, baby chicks poking through blue eggs. A great poem indeed!

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

You did such a wonderful job in describing the beautiful heart of Wildfleour... she is amazing and so is this tribute to her.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I loved it. You are a truely beautiful poet. I only wish I had a friend that cared this much.

Amazing. And I'm totally adding this to my library. Major kudos.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I agree that there is a couple problems with the tenses here. But it in an involving poem and is very colorful with imagery.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

What a beautiful and poetic tribute to a wonderful friend!

Wildfleour is truly amazing and you have captured her wonderful soul throughout this piece!

Brava!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

What a brilliant write. So sweet and special is that wildflower to deserve such a gift! I love being able to imagine this fight taking place with an actual flower, and it gives it so much meaning to imagine this. A delicate thing, fighting against all odds, and winning! Wonderfully worded, nicely done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very pretty, how special the wildflower must be.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wait I inspired this poem? LOL well it was a pretty poem ^_^

Posted 11 Years Ago



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