The inevitable

The inevitable

A Poem by Frankie
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A man is finally able to express himself to his lady love.

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Words! So many words! I was finally able to say

Nearly able to keep my emotions at bay


'What a relief!' I thought as my words flowed and flowed

I had gone to her private room Her humble abode


I feared her response Her reaction to my heart

But she stayed true to form. Such a sweetheart


Breathing and composure A constant battle

However, I charged ahead Pedal to the medal


I needed her to know Of my thoughts and feelings

Waiting any longer would have been oh so unappealing


You told me of your situation Very confusing

I confessed to you my own Not any less bemusing


Where do we go from here I asked so tenderly

You told me of our (limited) options Not wanting to hurt me


I left you right after My feelings now expressed

With all my romantic words You probably felt pressed


Sleep was difficult to get Later on that night

I so hoped you wanted me too, or that you just might


Our next steps are so unclear, not at all obvious

Although my emotions are spent Our future is still ambiguous


Our spending the next day together, was strange yet wonderful

You went back to being yourself How so very loveable


 

© 2020 Frankie


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Not sure if you did this on purpose, but your "tense" changes about midway thru . . . first she is a she, then she becomes "you" . . . I'm not against tense-changes, I do them myself & this one feels like a natural transition in viewpoint for your storyline. I just wondered if you were aware of it. Sometimes we miss when we do stuff like that. I love the word "inevitable" which seems to drive your storyline . . . conveying that sense we often get where we know we're going to fall, even tho we try to dance around it. Your poem shows this "falling" in a fun & realistic way. I could see this guy talking to himself as he stood on the ledge (the first part, where she is a she) . . . then he's talking to her (when she becomes "you") & that tense change, to me, shows that this guy has just gone even deeper & so the outcome is all the more inevitable (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frankie

1 Year Ago

Thank you! And I no, I didn't realize that. Wow. Lol



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Sometimes the only way is to face the music. We all eventually do. This is pure bravery to see it through. Thanks for sharing. /Frederick.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


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Frankie

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you, 😀
This is so wonderful, I love the story line behind it. So nicely written. Awesome write

Posted 6 Months Ago


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Frankie

6 Months Ago

Thank you! You are very kind.
Being in the moment and the now

Posted 12 Months Ago


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Frankie

12 Months Ago

It was indeed I was so much in love......yikes!
Sometimes talking it out is a good thing to do. Telling it like it is saves us time and one doesn't have to keep guessing if the other person is aware of how we feel. It puts us at an advantage. And we deserve it. After going through all the trials that love brings us. I sensed a lot of caring in your words. As if the poet is really into the person and is being very patient and going through a lot of uncertainty and yet sticking to her.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frankie

1 Year Ago

You nailed it! How true.
Wow!! This is simply amazing, I really enjoyed this well written write

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frankie

1 Year Ago

Thank you! You are too kind. I write this quite a few years ago.
Frankie

1 Year Ago

I appreciate the encouragement. This site hasn't been as helpful or as encouraging over the past f.. read more
Here's a lovely point in a relationship when its time for two people to realize how much they mean to each other or perhaps move and grow away from each other, which I feel is human too. I loved the way you narrated your thoughts and feelings!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frankie

1 Year Ago

Thank you! Yes, this relationship described here was at a crossroads....
Dhara_Ditzy Kat

1 Year Ago

You're welcome...😊
Relationships are always complicated. Everyone wants normal; normal doesn't exist. That's what's so wonderful, I think. Very nice poem :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frankie

1 Year Ago

You are very kind. 🙂

I'm glad you took the time.
Wow, that person sounds like they were only concerned for themself? So no real love lost there, no? If that's the case I feel you on that. This was good, I'm glad i came upon it.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frankie

1 Year Ago

You nailed it. Unfortunately. But at it turned out im much better off thanks for your thoug.. read more
Not sure if you did this on purpose, but your "tense" changes about midway thru . . . first she is a she, then she becomes "you" . . . I'm not against tense-changes, I do them myself & this one feels like a natural transition in viewpoint for your storyline. I just wondered if you were aware of it. Sometimes we miss when we do stuff like that. I love the word "inevitable" which seems to drive your storyline . . . conveying that sense we often get where we know we're going to fall, even tho we try to dance around it. Your poem shows this "falling" in a fun & realistic way. I could see this guy talking to himself as he stood on the ledge (the first part, where she is a she) . . . then he's talking to her (when she becomes "you") & that tense change, to me, shows that this guy has just gone even deeper & so the outcome is all the more inevitable (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frankie

1 Year Ago

Thank you! And I no, I didn't realize that. Wow. Lol
You're truly a romantic. It's lovely to see the world through eyes not so jaded. Keep up the writing!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Frankie

1 Year Ago

Thank you! That situation was a release, but it didn't work out. But I learned from it too.

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