About all these feelings I have for you
I wish you'd tell me what to do
I do wonder......
I don't want this to end badly
Since I'm in love with you so madly
I do wonder......
What it would be like to enjoy your smile all the more
Since I crave seeing you walk through any door
I do wonder......
About how I want to stay true
But I don't know what else to do
I do wonder......
Why I can't stop thinking of you
Even though I really should want to
I do wonder.......
About me telling you what's in my heart
And how your reaction could tear me apart
Hum...I came upon this from an old review you id for me. I do wonder, now, it's been 4 years since you posted this. Has your wonder claimed an answer? I do wonder....
The red font is perfect. A dichotomy of love potential or bleeding nothing. Love it!
Posted 1 Week Ago
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1 Week Ago
Thank you so much! I actually wrote this is 2005. It was a mistake that I'm glad I didn't make. .. read moreThank you so much! I actually wrote this is 2005. It was a mistake that I'm glad I didn't make. 🙂
The repetition of 'I do wonder' syncs perfectly with the delicacy of a heart.
Sometimes this 'I do wonder' gains too much weight to bear. Nice poem, Franky
- mou
Hum...I came upon this from an old review you id for me. I do wonder, now, it's been 4 years since you posted this. Has your wonder claimed an answer? I do wonder....
The red font is perfect. A dichotomy of love potential or bleeding nothing. Love it!
Posted 1 Week Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
1 Week Ago
Thank you so much! I actually wrote this is 2005. It was a mistake that I'm glad I didn't make. .. read moreThank you so much! I actually wrote this is 2005. It was a mistake that I'm glad I didn't make. 🙂
Ah, the hesitant unsurety of love. A rich well to draw from artistically, and this is a powerfully vulnerable piece. It reads like a whispered confession in the dark. Nicely done!
Posted 2 Months Ago
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2 Months Ago
Awe!: thanks straight from my heart. What a wonderful review. I appreciate you!
Rejection is powerful but grows us. We are all rejected in some way and forced to either push through or pivot. 🧘🏻♀️⬆️ ✨️ Always Go for it! That's what I say. Very Relatable piece 👌 👏
So very nicely written, I love the poetic feel of this write as well.
Awesome write
Posted 3 Months Ago
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3 Months Ago
That's very kind. Especially since I'm more of a story writer.
3 Months Ago
the last story I wrote has a little over 1,000 pages. I don't write too many stories anymore.
3 Months Ago
Why stop? What was it about,
3 Months Ago
It was called "Jenny's Colt" A little girl who got a colt for her birthday and it got stolen from he.. read moreIt was called "Jenny's Colt" A little girl who got a colt for her birthday and it got stolen from her about a month later. Everyone went searching for it, a couple years later the horse was found, it had got away from the person who stole it, she went through lengths to prove that it was once hers, I won her case. (Will this is the jest of it.
Nothing ventured, nothing gained. You can only play your cards so close to your chest for so long before you have to declare your hand. Love is a crap shoot at best, but the payoff, if it comes, is sweet and rich. That moment of vulnerability, when we are perched on the precipice of love and acceptance or the despair and agony of rejection. We have all been there, and can all understand the feelings here.
Posted 5 Months Ago
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5 Months Ago
Thank you! This one didn't work out though. But it's a good thing it didn't as it turned out.
Love, such a little word but what are we without it?
Your poem is relatable to every reader. Bringing us to that very moment where we must declare our heart or suffer in silence.
I read your poem and was moved by the raw emotion and vulnerability that you expressed. Your words capture the intensity of falling in love with someone and the confusion and uncertainty that can come with those feelings. I appreciated the way you used repetition to emphasize your wonderings and to create a sense of urgency in your words.
Your poem also touched on some important themes, such as the fear of rejection and the difficulty of being true to oneself in the face of uncertainty and risk. I felt a sense of empathy for the speaker in your poem, and I appreciated the way you explored these complex emotions with honesty and sensitivity.
Overall, I thought your poem was beautifully written and deeply felt. Your words capture the essence of what it means to be human and to experience the ups and downs of love and relationships. Thank you for sharing your work with the world, and I look forward to reading more of your poetry in the future.
Posted 9 Months Ago
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9 Months Ago
What a wonderful review! Thank you from deep in my heart for your honest and helpfil.thoughts and .. read moreWhat a wonderful review! Thank you from deep in my heart for your honest and helpfil.thoughts and points. I appreciate you greatly.
I need a space to share my writings so i can grow as a writer. I mostly write short stories, but I'm working on a book about a serious family saga.
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