Feeling it

Feeling it

A Poem by Frankie
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It happened one night.

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When I saw you   I knew

 

You had that look  The look that said yes

 

We had only been friends  This now changed

 

My mouth went dry   Your heart pounded

 

You smiled so sweet   My eyes so bright

 

I walked to you   You stood your space

 

You appeared unsure   My breathing was not

 

I sized you up   The momentum moved us

 

You stood in your area   The game was on

 

I touched your face   You didn't flinch

 

You looked up   I could hear your heart

 

You smiled sweetly   I kissed your lips

 

We knew

© 2020 Frankie


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The uncertainty between two friends, a friendship growing into something more, blossoming into a new relationship. You capture that intital awkwardness between two people, who have feelings for each other but who are unsure how to show it to the other person. In the end, they knew it was going to happen, the chemistry is there. Beautifully written!

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frankie

6 Days Ago

You.nailed it. That's what I wanted to show. Thanks!!
Aura

6 Days Ago

My pleasure!



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The uncertainty between two friends, a friendship growing into something more, blossoming into a new relationship. You capture that intital awkwardness between two people, who have feelings for each other but who are unsure how to show it to the other person. In the end, they knew it was going to happen, the chemistry is there. Beautifully written!

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frankie

6 Days Ago

You.nailed it. That's what I wanted to show. Thanks!!
Aura

6 Days Ago

My pleasure!
Although, I liked your words and definitely relate, I found it rather difficult to read because of the font you used and also because there is no punctuation...
I hope I have not offended you, and if so I am sorry...that is not my intention...
I just want to be 100% honest when leaving a review...especially if I really like the poem..
I feel this is important..
Just saying "Oh I love it" or " What a great poem" is not always good..
Lisa, now in Spain


Posted 1 Week Ago


Some of us are more adept at reading nonverbal cues. In this case both parties are what we all term as 'made for each other.' Thanks for sharing.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frankie

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks so much Frederick. This is a wonderful review. I appreciate your thoughts.
See? now the speaker in this poem found a friendship growing into something more.
I was a with a friend in college and we tried this...we were so alike....we thought....maybe we should...
the date ended without a goodnight kiss...we were laughing too hard....from embarrassment mostly.
then, we didn't speak to each other for a few months...we got over it...
she is the one who influenced me to start writing poetry.
I will always feel a special for her for that.
Your poem made me smile for many reasons.
thanks,
j.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frankie

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you for such a wonderful review and personal story. So sorry i just noticed this!
So sweet, beautiful and dreamy! When you know it's right nothing else matters!

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frankie

2 Months Ago

Thank you. You are kind to read and review. Have a great weekend.
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KATHY SUE SILLS

2 Months Ago

My pleasure! You have a great weekend too!
A charming, sweet write and it is very beautiful!

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is amazing, I believe guys and girls can be just friends, I have a best friend that is a man.
we get along fine. awesome write

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frankie

2 Months Ago

Thank you! Sorry I never noticed your wonderful review. I appreciate it so much.
This is so lovely, been there with those feelings...I enjoyed this write.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

such a cute poem. #feelingnostalgic :)

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

So, I'm thinking you and your friend are more than friends now.
Always great, that moment when it all comes together and the sparks start flying in a good way.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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I need a space to share my writings so i can grow as a writer. I mostly write short stories, but I'm working on a book about a serious family saga. I used to be with writerscafe from about 2009 to.. more..

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