TRAIL OF LIES

I was in the dark n shouting loud
when I hear your voice in a casual crowd
with a tongue of black
which truth just lack
with the floor just shook n' followed a crack..

I just tried to make my foot on way
All I need's some strength I dare to say
to bear such a dreadful night
to quench my thirst with a "SHINING DAY"

Shining day
yes I dare to say
I want a shining day
Can't I live my way..


I then watched you in the narrow street
With your head on his lap on a brownish seat
I just fell from the highest height
With anger being poured down through eyes..

Then I smashed my pitiable unrequited face
Coz, I didn't do wrong in our SHARED  case

Now I just hate of being an optimistic fool
who crushed his dreams for a lady so cruel
Though she stole my heart with her glaring eyes
Still i don't want a trail of lies

I can live my life as a lonely one
With days like nights in-spite of sun
A body devoid of heart n' soul
But i can surely learn to crawl...

yes i can learn to crawl

yes i can learn to crawl

Yes i'll crawl
even i'll fall
With betrayed soul
still i'll crawl..

Yes i'll crawl
even i'll fall
With betrayed soul
still i'll crawl..

Author's Note

my first song..
hope you all like it

Reviews

[guy drori]

Enojyed reading this. Liked your line breaks. Also your rhyming wasn't forced upon which allowed the poem to flow nicely. From your choice of words I could tell that the speaker has quite a strong personality. Glad you shared this...

[Basu Gupta]

Thank You for reading

[Peach]

I liked the choice of words.

[Basu Gupta]

Thank You for reading.

[blondecat84]

superb
good
really like it
you are very talented

[Basu Gupta]

Thank you..

[lord]

good ,well done, nice job, keep it up....i wanna know why your poetry declare love of mortal being???? think about immortal love of god....

[Basu Gupta]

Gonna think..I'll come up with something of that sort now..
thanks for visiting

[TL Boehm]

I was just going to say as I read this that it is very songlike. Lyrical and well crafted. Well done.

[Basu Gupta]

Thank You very much..

[Patricia]

Very nice piece and yes I like it. :)

[Basu Gupta]

Thanks Patricia

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

This is a nice lyrical piece. Bravo!

[Basu Gupta]

Thank You Dhaye

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

You're welcome.

[Ana]

Love the anger of your soul. I've been there myself, though it was many years ago.

[Basu Gupta]

Hey thank you..
btw it's just fictitous for me
I've never been in this kinda stuff..but it's really feel great that you can relate with it..
Thanksvfor stopping by

[Rachelle]

The tragedy of love unrequited worsened by betrayal. I have yet to hear the melody to give any final feedback.

[Basu Gupta]

Ya sure..I'm waiting for your feedback

[Rachelle]

no link

[Basu Gupta]

I'm sorry..
here is the link
www.beyauneturnitei.blogspot.com
n I'll be really greatful if you can give your feedback there too

[Rachelle]

Sorry, the video says "Error."
I checked out the other one. Play the acoustic guitar myself. See PM.

[Basu Gupta]

I didn't get you..PM what?

[Rachelle]

Just did.

[alegria]

nice song... lovely lyrics.. :)

[Basu Gupta]

Thank you alge..