Midnight Rose

Trying to jump start my brain, wanted to be gothic like 'Midnight Serenade'

 

In her garden of roses,

‘Neath a pale full moon

Waiting for her lost love

Singing her sorrowful tune

 

Reminiscing of the days

Of romance and passion

Red wine kisses and sex séances

When brighter days were in fashion

 

Now she wanders in her garden

So elegant in her dark veil

Aching in her heavy heart

Leaving roses in her trail

 

She dreams the night away

Never leaving her roses behind

Asking the questions of life after death

Lingering within her mind

 

In the mist, she haunts

Darkness camouflages her clothes

Weeping for her long lost love,

The lonely midnight rose

Reviews

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

In the mist, she haunts
Midnight camouflages her clothes
Weeping for her long lost love,
They call her the midnight rose I love the last line. I think the use of midnight may be repeative which might make you dislike the last line. So maybe instead of changing the last line change midnight in this line:

Midnight camouflages her clothes to darkness, or gloom or something in that nature .

Just my opion. The poem is excellent as all your work is, but we are our worse credics. You ask for suggestion so there you have it.

[Brette Medb]

This was so beautiful and haunting! I loved the line with her leaving the trail of roses behind her. The imagery was amazing and it the rhyme flowed perfectly. Great write!

Brette

[Fran Marie]

An Excellent piece beautifully expressed and well penned~Fran

[Ralphy]

I love the mystic approach, and her vision�but not the haunts�does she really haunt??? I love your writings for they not only captivate my imagination but entertain me with thrills and frills�Nice Rayne

[Midnight Rose ~*Anna Ro..]

This is awesome! Totally goes with my name, if i may can I use this on my profile? I'll give you all the credit of course.

[Chiquita]

Love that has slipped away is too sad. We all know it's sting. I feel a darkness of woe in the midnight air. I feel the midnihgt chill and see life through her dark veil of mourning. The rose is a telling of something that was beautiful. Yet every rose holds thorns that can inflict wounds. The roses feel cold and dark. You have painted a vivd image.

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This is amazing! I loved the image you painted with your words. My favorite lines are in the first stanza. Great piece of poetry!

[Glee]

In the mist, she haunts. Does she really haunt? It brings in kind of a creepy angle to the lost love story. Along with the darkness and all. Nice twist.

[These Haunted Hallways]

Ooo!! Spectacularly done!! :) I love the haunting, dark, and romantic vernacular that u gave it. Ur such an awesome writer, and pro at this type of writing, hun :) And very cool pictures u gave every write, too. Very cool :) Ur so amazing, hehe!

B.A.

[CarrieLynn {Chameleon A..]

stunning piece! :)

[George Love]

Excellent work, sort of old school feel. Nicely done