The Mark

One little mark
Easy to bare
Who in their mind
Would even care
Tempest flooding
My mind growing grim
Throwing away thoughts
Mere memories of him

Flood gates open
Release the tears
That now flood
Catching the image
Covered in blood
Hide behind the smiles
From truths I dare not see
Fighting daily
Trying to stay free

Reviews

[dead man talking]

Bert loved it,so did i

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This is a sad story, but I see a a strong spirit on the verge of great things to come.

[OnceUponAMelody]

Short, sweet and to the point. There are a lot of powerful things here in such a short statement. I like this, but the extra line in the second stanza just throws off the flow completely. In my opinion, you should reduce the second stanza to eight lines to avoid any disruptions, because other than that, this is a really powerful thing you have here.