Mirage

Mirage

A Poem by Becky Kilsby
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Octain

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Natalya flicks her henna’d hips
unveils a sheisha melody
gyrates a chinking harmony

Natalya ripples tingling dips
froths musky dreams, oasis streams
full- blooming sandscaped YouTube scripts.

Oud-throated lust-grained litany:
Natalya whirls her henna’d hips.

© 2011 Becky Kilsby


Author's Note

Becky Kilsby
This is an octain - a form devised by Luke Prater (http://lukeswordsalad.com)

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Love this Becky. I hadn't realized we can have our own page on here!
I thought the name was spelt Natalia, though names can be spelt any old way.
I think 'You Tube' would be more effective written 'Utube' as on the site.
You've really caught the flavour of the Middle East, you have a knack for that and the final couplet is standout good.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Nicely done.

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is hot. Makes me want to lose 200 lbs.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Great octain Becky, you really excel at these short forms selecting just the right word to convey your intended meaning. Love the movement in this one and those YouTube scripts...how true.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Wonderful! I love how you captured the essence of the Middle East.

Beth

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Love this Becky. I hadn't realized we can have our own page on here!
I thought the name was spelt Natalia, though names can be spelt any old way.
I think 'You Tube' would be more effective written 'Utube' as on the site.
You've really caught the flavour of the Middle East, you have a knack for that and the final couplet is standout good.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on September 24, 2011
Last Updated on September 24, 2011
Tags: belly dancing, fantasy, music, desert, foreigner, multi-cultural

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Becky Kilsby
Becky Kilsby

Dubai, United Arab Emirates



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