Night Terror

Night Terror

A Poem by BeeBev
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A nightmare real or imaginary?

"

His leer burns through my harried soul

Sobs wrack my body

I quake with fear


Long talonlike nails over sweat soaked skin

A gasp escapes

From deep within


Lungs of my own cease their frenzied dance

A heaviness rests

Atop my heaving chest


My body as still stone unable to move

My flesh crawling

Itching beneath the demons gaze


A scream all my own my eyes open wide

An empty room awaits

No creatures within


As i lay down to sleep and close my eyes

A voice enters my head

Or was it always inside?


"Be still my child and keep closed those eyes

Follow me down through the dark

To the madness inside".

© 2015 BeeBev


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BeeBev
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Very nice. Or rather not nice? Imaginative. I hope you're sleeping better these days.

Posted 4 Years Ago


BeeBev

4 Years Ago

Thank you for you comments.
Really well written. The image it gives the reader is really interesting.

Posted 4 Years Ago


BeeBev

4 Years Ago

Thanks for reading.
Really enjoyed the word choice and the way your words paint a very vivid picture. An awesome read, you should write on more dark themes.


Posted 4 Years Ago


BeeBev

4 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind words I love writing dark material just lack confidence with poetry at the m.. read more
Warren Daniel II

4 Years Ago

I share the same problem when it comes to poetry, haven't posted any poetry yet but plan on doing so.. read more
This is definitely up my alley. Very visual and emotionally provocative. There is an air of darkness in this that appeals to me. Well penned overall.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

BeeBev

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much
Your work is very descriptive. The imagery is visceral as well as psychological. I can relate a little, having had nights when I couldn't sleep. I had a fear, which you evoke well in this piece. My favorite part of this piece is the very end. It seems dark on one hand, but bright on the other, because it suggests to me, as if God is inviting you in. He reigns over darkness and light, so he knows both equally well. Nicely done.

Posted 4 Years Ago


I think the deepest darkness is our own perception of what IS within our mind at any given moment.



Posted 4 Years Ago


BeeBev

4 Years Ago

Yes i agree thanks for reading.
Poetry read and felt like you’re watching a thriller...great write

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

BeeBev

4 Years Ago

Thank you for taking the time to read my work.
A. Amos

4 Years Ago

You're most welcome my friend...
Ooooh. I love dark poems like this. Well done. I visualized this entire poem like a story

Posted 4 Years Ago


BeeBev

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much glad you liked it.
Project Mayhem

4 Years Ago

No problem. would you like to review mine? Polynomial Pain
BeeBev

4 Years Ago

Yes of course.

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