Otherwise, it's Fine

I' m thinking of the song but DD Smash, Th' Dudes or Dave Dobbyn... one of them three.

Yeah, sure!
You can borrow my pen.
No, don't give it back.
I have heaps at home.
I'll have to use my black one for now,
but otherwise, it's fine.

Yeah, sure!
You can have my lunch.
No, don't give me yours.
I'll have some food at home.
I'll be hungry until then,
but otherwise, it's fine.

Yeah, sure!
You can hold my hand.
No, I like you too, don't stress.
You do go out with someone else,
and that's against my morals,
but otherwise, it's fine.

Yeah, sure!
You can kiss me.
No, I don't mind you have a cold.
I might be going overseas soon,
and Mum said I should stay healthy,
but otherwise, it's fine.

Yeah, sure!
You can take me to your bedroom.
No, I don't mind you have AIDS.
It's ok if it's unprotected.
I know I should be saying no,
but otherwise, it's fine.

Yeah, sure!
You can get angry at me.
No, I don't mind if I'm grounded for a year.
It's my fault I went with his needs.
I'm now living with AIDS, I know,
but otherwise, it's fine

Yeah, sure!
You can turn my life support off.
No, I know I'm in a coma, but who listens?
I got AIDS, it's not your responsibility.
I wanted to live until I was 100,
but otherwise, it's fine.

Reviews

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

Sometimes impulse and the willingness into what the other person says instead of putting your foot down and saying no can lead you into a situation you rather not be in...
well written and nice format...

[Liza]

oh my; the submission and the acceptance
of a not so light reality
thank you for sharing

[mischeif]

I agree with tophatgirl. i enjoyed the start not the end though. (shiver)

[TopHatGirl]

Excellent. The repetition worked right into the poem. And it showed how willing people can be in these days. Great poem. :)

[Livana Lowell]

Wow, very powerful piece conveying the important lesson of abuse.

The beginning repetation use (or was it anaphorical) makes the lines behind it seem quite casual, but then turns out to be solemn and meaningful.

A whole morally beautiful story hides behind those stanzas and I really like it.

Wonderful poem.

[Coyote Poetry]

In this world. Many are what you described in your world. Use and abuse. Don't care for what they leave behind. A powerful poem with a purpose. We need to be careful and protect our mind and body. Total poem was strong and the story told a sad story. A excellent poem.
Coyote