This Is Your Heart

This Is Your Heart

A Poem by Ben Barton

Dust lines the mantlepiece;
How long has it been,
Since you've opened this door?
How long has it been,
Since you gave away the key?

You gave it to lovers,
Who couldn't find the time
You gave it to work,
Which shuttered up your mind
You gave it to bottles,
And there you sought to drown
You gave it to darkness,
And hoped never to be found

My, what a battle it has been,
Taking back the key to your heart
So now, blow the dust from the mantlepiece,
Wipe clean the past; restart

© 2016 Ben Barton


Author's Note

Ben Barton
Inspired by the song "Laura Palmer" by Bastille; in particular, the pre-chorus line of "This is your heart, can you feel it? Can you feel it?"

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I can relate to this piece. Definitely not a light matter giving that key away over and over until you find the hopeful match. Bets of luck friend. Cheers.

Posted 3 Years Ago


An excellent piece of writing. Most impressive thing was the way how you related two actions in second stanza, each giving way to other. In the end the concept of Clean slate was a good idea.The flow of your poem is beautiful,
ending was good too. Will be looking forward to read your other works.
Regards
Usman

Posted 3 Years Ago


I love this a lot (though perhaps I'm a little biased; Laura Palmer's my favourite Bastille song - and the title of the poem definitely lured me in) - I adored the last line especially, and also loved the way you grab the readers attention in the first stanza with those questions. Awesome work!

Posted 3 Years Ago


I like this... but it seems to be about more than just the heart.
The heart given to lovers --> felt unwanted
Gave to work --> probably unvalued
From the bottle to despair... that key will be for the self, the soul.
But a positive Restart at the end...
From despair to hope.

Posted 3 Years Ago


This is great. So is the six-word one. Both are worded very well and cause me to bring about a process of introspection as I read. Well done.

Posted 3 Years Ago


I like this piece. It's well crafted and flows well.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Ben Barton

3 Years Ago

Thank you, Jeff! It was off the cuff somewhat, so I'm glad you think it's well crafted. Thanks for t.. read more

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Ben Barton
Ben Barton

Hereford, Herefordshire, United Kingdom



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