The Sensation...

The Sensation...

A Poem by Ben
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Of grass...

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I pick up a blade of grass,

And put it to my index finger.

I only pause for a little,

Before I move the blade of grass,

Across my finger,

The sticky sensation of the blade,

Slicing through my skin,

Wonderful, yet painful.

© 2009 Ben


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I really like this poem. I don't know why, but it reminds me of my childhood...

Guess it's cause I was one of those kids who loved to play in the grass?! Lol.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Sharp blade of grass...

Good poem, though. Short, to the point. I like brief poems, but I htink this one's missing something. However, I love the line, '...sticky sensation of the blade...' GJ.

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is very short, something I've noticed in many of your poems, but I like the content of them, simple yet full of voice.

I loved it but maybe you should try adding a little, detail on the subjects you love, passion on the one's you hate. Writing should be an expression of self, so show everyone who you are in your writing.

Nae-Nae ...

Posted 14 Years Ago


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i like what you wrote, but i think you need to add a little more. good job, can't wait to read more.

Posted 14 Years Ago


I like this ben. it made me laugh. but i would add a bit more detail and i like the subject. but tell more about how it made you feel and how it hurt not just like 'wonderful yet painful' why is it wonderful and why is it painful? ya know?
another good piece ben!

Posted 14 Years Ago


nice writing, its amazing though. How a blade of grass, grass I say, can cut you. lol, I know, it happened to me. good write Ben.

Posted 14 Years Ago


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What you have is good but you should add more to the story. The writing adds visuals which makes the poem sound more real. It's good writing! :)

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Added on July 22, 2009
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