JUST

JUST

A Poem by Betty

JUST

Wood is just wood,
A dead, lifeless piece of what was once a beautiful tree.
A stone is just a stone,
As dead and lifeless as it was before we were even born;
A sole entity that has never felt the touch of time;
A touch, life speaks of only in the language of rhyme.

A sea is just a sea,
A hollow ground where every drip of rain finds harmony.
And life,
Yes, life is just a loan
A loan we took for reasons yet unknown.

© 2013 Betty


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Betty this is gorgeous. Its so deep and contemplative
"A sea is just a sea,
A hollow ground where every drip of rain finds harmony.
And life,
Yes, life is just a loan
A loan we took for reasons yet unknown." - sheer brilliance Betty.

If I may - can i suggest that you change 'a wood' to just 'wood' - In England 'a wood' is alive because its the name of a small forest and in golf a wood is a golf club - they are not relevant and take away from the poem. What do you think my friend?
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Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Betty

6 Years Ago

Anto, my dear friend how could i ever thank you enough for all the nice things you say, and for the .. read more
ANTO

6 Years Ago

We are all here to help and support Betty. I just got in first thats all. You're very welcome.
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Imaginative, silent, hollow... ends with a breeze. There is obvious talent at work here, but I feel the poem is scattered, if everything is just as it is, why is life any different?


Posted 5 Years Ago


Betty

5 Years Ago

Thank you Moyo :)
Short but clever, Betty. I like the analogies of things and life here.
Brilliant!

Posted 5 Years Ago


Betty

5 Years Ago

Thank you Margurite :)
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Dye
Very nice Betty.

"And life,
Yes, life is just a loan
A loan we took for reasons yet unknown."

Yes, just a loan indeed. Very nicely penned.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Betty

5 Years Ago

Thank you so much Dye. I really am glad you enjoyed it :)
great write, thought provoking!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Betty

5 Years Ago

Thanks Leandro :)
Hi Betty. I like th creativity in your poem. The title "just" is captivatively proficient. It's coming out as an object of relating or likening one piece to th other. Thus, giving life to th entire poem. Keep writing pal. And if you do short stories, post them too! Gud luck

Posted 6 Years Ago


Betty

6 Years Ago

Petah, thank you so much for dropping by and for leaving me this wonderful review. And yes i am actu.. read more
petah

6 Years Ago

Betty, thanx 4 yo kind reply. Imagine I mostly do short stories, not poetry altho I like anytin 2 do.. read more
"Yes, life is just a loan
A loan we took for reasons yet unknown."
Brilliant.This poem is beautiful, Betty. Such a thoughtful piece.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Betty

6 Years Ago

Thank you Danielle, for the review.
and this is "just" a good poem...

yes, life is a loan and the best way to pay it back with interest is make the most of it.

i like all the nature justs..and then how that lead to what we have been given..a special gift. LIFE.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Betty

6 Years Ago

Jacob thank you so much for the kind words. And yes Life is loan we can not afford to squander :)
A soecial and inspiring poem that has all the hallmarks of good composition. Very enjoyable and thought-provoking. david

Posted 6 Years Ago


Betty

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much for the review David. I really am glad you enjoyed it.
Nicely penned Betty and I agree with Anthony about the wood too...enjoyed reading...Rose:)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Betty

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much Rose. And yes i finally finished editing that part :)
Betty this is gorgeous. Its so deep and contemplative
"A sea is just a sea,
A hollow ground where every drip of rain finds harmony.
And life,
Yes, life is just a loan
A loan we took for reasons yet unknown." - sheer brilliance Betty.

If I may - can i suggest that you change 'a wood' to just 'wood' - In England 'a wood' is alive because its the name of a small forest and in golf a wood is a golf club - they are not relevant and take away from the poem. What do you think my friend?
X

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Betty

6 Years Ago

Anto, my dear friend how could i ever thank you enough for all the nice things you say, and for the .. read more
ANTO

6 Years Ago

We are all here to help and support Betty. I just got in first thats all. You're very welcome.
read more

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addis ababa, Bole sub City, Ethiopia



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