THREE STUDIES

THREE STUDIES

A Poem by Betty Hermelee
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HAIKU; thee people

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THREE STUDIES

FAITH
If I can believe
in a healer, I'm content
but I can't find one.

MOONLIT
Let me seduce you
to my moonlit planet Hope
and never leave it

REALITY?
Her angelic face
traps me in a trance-like calm
yet she is not real.

© 2020 Betty Hermelee


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i like how these three Senryu can act alone...but as a trio, they work to tell a never ending story...
nicely done, Betty...
Faith is the toughest...to believe in what we can't see, and often can't feel...
and the reality often is we get a false sense of calm, just before the storm hits...the storm being quite real.
j.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Your haiku format works well, Betty. It is challenging to remain both grammatical and prosaic. The short words allow room to achieve eloquence. Nice blend of topics and imagery. I might have gone for a "Your shadowy face" to strengthen the mood and narrative sequence. Good job.

Posted 2 Months Ago


#3 - my fave cuz it's so evocative of many ways we delude ourselves.
#1 - next fave cuz the last line is contrary & unexpected.
#2 - I'm stuck on how the grammar feels clunky . . .
. . . . . "let me seduce you & never leave it" (doesn't sound right)

Most of all, I love your plan to use 3 haiku named for life concepts while suggesting this is 3 different people . . . nicely thought-provoking! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

An nteresting trio of thoughts.

Posted 2 Months Ago


on the way to visit my folks for so many years
along interstate 40...they lived in Whispering Pines....
I would stay over night in Black Mountain....beautiful place...
j.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i like how these three Senryu can act alone...but as a trio, they work to tell a never ending story...
nicely done, Betty...
Faith is the toughest...to believe in what we can't see, and often can't feel...
and the reality often is we get a false sense of calm, just before the storm hits...the storm being quite real.
j.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very interesting poem. Sometimes it's hard to differniate between reality and fiction.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Betty Hermelee
Betty Hermelee

Black Mountain, NC



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I am an emerging poet; I have written over 250 poems, mostly about slices of life, happy or sad, sometimes tragic. I try to use vivid images in my poetry. I also write about my extensive travel expe.. more..

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